My Sapphire Sky

My kind of proposal. Looking for a good title.

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And when I'll kneel down, I'll make sure everyone keeps your five senses busy.

There will be the last bit of daylight to show you her most passionate panaroma. 

The sea will be playing your favorite susurration of waves just to serenade you. 

My sapphire sky will effuse hues from evening to caress your skin. 

The breeze will unfurl its freshly-stolen fragrance from the greens. 

And I'll be standing there, 

                 to offer my feelings,

                     all of my own senses to you, 

and ask, 

if you'd like to keep tasting my weird love forever.

Author's Note

Might change the title if I find something better.

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Interesting title, and such a nice surprise give to us with the ending.
A truly romantic poem.
j.

[moog-drika]

Hey, thanks a bunch for the compliment. Means a lot.:D
Yes, the ending was supposed to be a total surprise. However, now when I look back, I feel that the expression I kicked it off with kinda spills the beans.
*facepalm*

[Crosby Idasa]

Nice poem for the building to enjoy ❤️

[moog-drika]

thank you so much for the praise. *hearts*

[Robert Trakofler]

Mugda, all I can say is who could refuse such a sincere expression of love! If it was me I would entitle it Singular Embrace:)

[moog-drika]

Well, well, look who's got a keen eye for poem and a knack for title-making! Thanks a bunch for the kind words and taking time to suggest a title. Singular Embrace does capture the feeling I poured into it.
Can't believe you dig my poetry that much. It really means a lotttttt. Sending infinite hearts.

[Aryan J]

I love the line in the end tbvh

[moog-drika]

Happy to know that you enjoyed the ending line of my poem. Thanks a bunch :D

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I'd go for 'Sapphire Sky' if you wish to keep it romantic. And 'Weird Love' if you're going for a bit of comical side. ;)

A refreshing read, this one.

[moog-drika]

Shoot! 'Sapphire Sky' and 'Weird Love' are both amazing title ideas. Another poet also suggested Sapphire Sky here.
However, I must admit, they've got me quite torn too! I love them both, and it's making my decision pretty difficult. But hey, having such great options to choose from is a wonderful problem to have.
Thanks again for the praise, means a lot!

[Chris Shaw]

The sea, sapphire sky and breeze, you offer him as well as yourself, your senses and your love. I think he is a lucky man moog-drika. A poem filled with romance for a special someone. Nicely penned.

Chris

[moog-drika]

I'll for sure show this comment to my guy to make him realize how lucky he is haha.

Jokes aside, thank you so much for all the positive words. Glad to have your thoughts on my poem.

Yes, it's all about capturing those beautiful moments and sharing them with someone special. Cheers!

[Sami Khalil]

You usually write short poems with strong messages. This was different.
Did not know you are engaged and have that side of romance.
Enjoyed your new style.

[moog-drika]

Feels great to know that you enjoyed my new style and noticed my pattern of writeup. Also your comment about my pieces having strong messages made my day. Really appreciate you feel that way.
And yes, I'm engaged and will soon get hitched. :'D

[Sami Khalil]

Wow! Congratulations. You are welcome.

[moog-drika]

Thanks a bunch :D

[Coyote Poetry]

My sapphire sky. Dear moog-drika. I enjoyed the fieldtrip in your words. The words felt like a Spring kiss, lost and someone is seeking. Someone needing to be serenade and the poetry was wonderful. Thank you dear friend for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[moog-drika]

So glad that the comment came from someone who's one of my favorites when it comes to romantic writing. Thank you for sharing what you felt from the piece as well as for the praise. Means a lot.

[Coyote Poetry]

I adored the poetry dear moog-drika.