Don't Cry for Me

Don't Cry for Me

A Poem by dawn aulis

Don’t cry for me

Don’t cry for me, I did not fall,

Picked myself up, climbed that wall.

Reached the top, with no looking back,

Jumped down to freedom, free from my pack.

All alone, I cleared the tide,

Somehow I made it, I survived.

I’m not that girl, who had to leave,

She is gone, no need to grieve.

She hurts no more, in my dreams,

She is happy, or so it seems.

She could not make it, to the other side,

She had to stay, so I could survive.

If she came along with me,

The world would know, they all could see.

The pain inside she had endured,

I let her go, that was my cure.

Washed myself, with sweat and tears,

Wiped away all those years.

So cry for her if you must,

She was me, before the cusp.

I cleared that breach, by myself,

She stayed back there, on the shelf.

I could not bring her, here with me,

Without her here, I can be free.

© 2013 dawn aulis


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nicely portrayed Dawn. Survival of the fittest, which I too have written about, but not in the same way. Nice to read you are one of the fitter ones :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


Changing oneself is a feat only the brave and the smart can do. I must say, this shows how you value self preservation and the like. Problems of the past are just that, in the PAST. so we must forget them to move on... nice build up.

But I think there is a slight cripple of idea there

"Don’t cry for me, I did not fall,
Picked myself up, climbed that wall."

Why did she pick herself up if she did not fall? I thought over the entire poem and this is what the intro should be, in my opinion:

Don’t cry for me, Though I did fall,

It makes sense why the protagonist warns the reader to not cry though they feel pity to him/her. Plus, in the near end, she explained how pitiable her original self was, which would then be parallel to the intro if she did fall...

Well, it is my opinion :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


dawn aulis

9 Years Ago

Thank you for the comments, I should explain that what I wrote was exactly what I meant to say. If o.. read more
Monster ^.^

9 Years Ago

"If one starts at the bottom, you have to pick yourself up, do you not?" this is what I thought prec.. read more
dawn aulis

9 Years Ago

Thanks
These words are beautiful. A bittersweet tale for sure, a separation so one can move forward. A renewed hope for the future, an inspiration... Lovely. Thanks for sharing, I really enjoyed reading this piece.

Posted 9 Years Ago


dawn aulis

9 Years Ago

Thank you

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