Trapped where i don't want to be

Trapped where i don't want to be

A Poem by SarahCortland

A nightmare i had last night

The stars are shining
but the sky is dim.
My mind almost blank
but still thoughts of him.

Dreaming of my fear
reviewing the scene
Usually I wake up
as soon as I scream.

This time I stay
this time I can't leave.
The dream keeps going
shattering all i believe

This nightmare now to long
showing me all my fears.
I just want to be awake
to rid myself of these tears.

With a loud noise I receive my relief
but my heart is beating rapidly with no end.
Shaking and scared I still am
wondering if this was the pain he did intend.

© 2010 SarahCortland

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Creepy stuff. You can feel the fear the dream draws. Good write.

Posted 11 Years Ago

Love that last line. Not sure why you so feared this guy, or why the nightmare was so tramautizing. I love the description in the begining you give us some good concrete images. Very good.

Posted 11 Years Ago

The blazing heat of this poem is still burning my computer screen. I love the flow you have, but at the end it does become a little off. I would try shorting the last stanza, but that is my opinion. Other then that this poem is amazing and stunning. Great job.

Posted 11 Years Ago

strong. i love it :D good job.

Posted 11 Years Ago

awesome ending!

Posted 11 Years Ago

Great poem.
You are very ferocious in the many of your poems, but in a good way.
Nicely done all around.

Posted 11 Years Ago

This poem was blazing. If you printed it out, animals would probably
smell the fear it in.

Posted 11 Years Ago

another awesome poem!

Posted 11 Years Ago

Another fantastic poem. Great job!

Posted 11 Years Ago

1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Nice sweetie. :)

Posted 11 Years Ago

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Added on May 14, 2010
Last Updated on May 18, 2010
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Owensboro, KY

My name is Myspace Layouts. I love to Write poetry and I am currently working on one book. Sometimes I write short stories but Poetry is what i like to Stick to. Confidence Quotes .. more..


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