Satiating Stray

To yearn is to ache 

When that emptiness is filled 

Where does that pain go?

We give it a name 

We give it a place to sleep 

And pray it away 

Owned like a stray dog

A placeholder of true warmth 

Too soon discarded

We make so much room 

For this hurt, and then blame it

For taking up space 

Emptiness is filled

It takes the place of the stray 

The real replaces

Bandage that worry

Forget that distracting dog

Its no longer yours

No ceremonies

Leave that satiation, the

Wounds that kept you warm

Reviews

[Aneurin]

good premise. while normally I don't like introducing an idea so clearly at the beginning of a poem it works very well in this case, maybe because it's complex or interesting enough that it feels like a lot. the second stanza is great, to the point that I feel I don't even need to describe why. it just is. I like all of the short, rather out of context sentences as well. "leave that satiation, the wounds that kept you warm", "bandage that worry" "forget that distracting dog", and "the real replaces" are all good examples of this. they feel like little sporadic bursts, which can help keep the rhythm of the poem, and keep the reader interested. I usually don't rate stuff out of 100, so my rating here is "very good, keep writing like this".

[jaye river]

"We make so much room
For this hurt, and then blame it
For taking up space"

you are too good, my friend. just too good

[nadia dmitri]

That is so kind, thank you :)