how many more?

how many more?

A Poem by Natalie

I wonder how many coffee cups

have borne your touch,

the warmth of your lips

and been recklessly abandoned.

 

I wonder how many blankets

have given you comfort,

and just how many

have been twisted in your slumber.

 

I wonder how many pills

have passed through your system

trying to fix you, to fight for you,

only to be taken apart into pieces.

 

And I wonder,

just how many more white pages you will write on

with your heart of ink,

describing your sad, sad eyes,

laughing as you write,

your hands trembling with sadistic glee.

© 2014 Natalie


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Natalie
Photo: http://imisshowitwasbefore.tumblr.com/post/105312158963

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"I wonder how many pills
have passed through your system
trying to fix you, to fight for you,
only to be taken apart into pieces."

This excerpt is simplistically brilliant.
I would buy a book just based on those few lines.
You convey a powerful message in very few words.
I can't wait to read more.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Natalie

6 Years Ago

Thank you so much for your generous comment :)



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I like the progression of it. From material trivial, coffee cup, to blankets, to pills, to art.

At each step the poem seemed to wratch up the levity.

Posted 6 Years Ago


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JC
Very intriguing, creative piece, showing recklessness and duality. I like how you don't write in anger or passing judgment, seems like you are moreso observing this person and recognizing contradiction in human behavior, hidden agenda,...a lot can be gleaned from this. Great job.

Posted 6 Years Ago


That's DEEP, very well written, and I as most reader's can probably TOTALLY relate to all of these images and analogies. Thanks. PS-Great Pic

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Natalie

6 Years Ago

I'm glad you enjoyed it! Thank you for your review :)
Don't just B, but B amazing!

6 Years Ago

Your welcome.
"And I wonder,
just how many more white pages you will write on
with your heart of ink,
describing your sad, sad eyes,
laughing as you write,
your hands trembling with sadistic glee."

Just loved these lines. Well done Natalie..:)


Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Natalie

6 Years Ago

Thank you so much!
"I wonder how many pills
have passed through your system
trying to fix you, to fight for you,
only to be taken apart into pieces."

This excerpt is simplistically brilliant.
I would buy a book just based on those few lines.
You convey a powerful message in very few words.
I can't wait to read more.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Natalie

6 Years Ago

Thank you so much for your generous comment :)
laughing with sadistic glee as the poet spends his last days writing in a frenzy....
this sounds like disease has riddled the poet....but reminds me of how sylvia plath was writing her best stuff during her last days before her suicide....

this is intense, clever and moving...

jacob

Posted 6 Years Ago


Lovely write here. It is the first i have read of yours... impressive

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Natalie

6 Years Ago

Thank you so much for your comment :)
I can't express the feelings that had came over me while reading this lovely piece of art. You truly have a talent. You began simple, as though it were another casual poem. But then the last stanza crossed my eyes...

"just how many more white pages you will write on
with your heart of ink,"

Those two lines touched my heart rather sincerely, because, as writers, we bleed onto the paper as we right. But you, instead of bleeding onto the paper, you express that the person is writing with a heart of ink. It is a similar concept, but worded much differently. Well done, a very delightful piece!

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Natalie

6 Years Ago

Wow! Thank you so much for your generous review! :) I'm really glad you enjoyed it.
Your Just One Kind Friend Away For What You Seek Human!!
I hope it answers most of your questions. It was really good. I mean the usual love background it had but flavour was different. It was nice Maam

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Natalie

6 Years Ago

Thank you! :)
IN a relationship there always are a lot of questions. This poem is very well written and make the feelings strong. :) Great write :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Natalie

6 Years Ago

Thank you! :)

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Hi there! My name is Natalie, and I enjoy writing in my free time. All things I write are personal and I use poems and long paragraphs to express myself, my happiness, displeasures and curiosities. more..

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