To a Sperm that May Have Reached its Egg

One of those "oops" moments

How unexpected,
the dawn breaking
after a long night
of partying, the way
the light penetrates
through thick curtains
and leaves behind
a trace, a sliver of
the new day, and even
as I pull the covers
over my head, the sun
makes its way
into my bedroom,
and I find you laying
there beside me.

Reviews

[W.k.kortas]

Well, it isn't a subject you read an ode to everyday. The notion of the sun making its way into the bedroom, and the "trace" left behind is wry and dry. Clever and well-built stuff.

[Karen]

Thank you, it was a fun write!

[ANTO]

"...and leaves behind
a trace, a sliver" - great choice of words for the oops in question Karen.
I liked the humour behind a scenario that could be life-changing.
Well handled and written.

[Karen]

LOL... yes, it could definitely have been life-changing! Thank you, Anto. I had fun with this one even as I was shaking in my boots! LOL

[ANTO]

Humour at a time of trial - thats such a gift. If my boots shake then I cant even think
:)

[Pryde Foltz]

The birth of new life is such a miraculous experience for the body and the soul. Gorgeous write, here.

[Karen]

Thank you Pryde... what did you like about the poem in particular?

[Pryde Foltz]

There is some lovely phrasing but mostly I found it personally meaningful … I might give it a different title but otherwise it was a very find write.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and now the panic!

something about that analogy of the light Penetrating through the curtains.

a smile for the reader...but not for the speaker.

damn that party.

[Karen]

Yes, I was quite panicked... and wrote this poem soon after lol. Strange that in my panic a poem surged.