Good Morning, Honey

Good Morning, Honey

A Poem by Saichiro Wolftotem
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A poem about this crazy dream I had when I was 12.

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A technicolor path before,

A chasing creature far behind,

Limbs are stretching from the core,

Hallways...hallways...none to find.

 

I run and run but no avail,

It's face split lengthwise down the middle,

Rows of shark-teeth sharp and pale,

From it's lips drips acid spittle.

 

I run but cannot get away,

For every inch it gains two more,

I cannot keep this thing at bay

I dead-end at a locked-up door.

 

This is a dream!

I know at once.

Not as it seems,

I'm such a dunce.

 

Wake up, wake up...wake UP, me!

I jolt awake in my upper bunk,

How messed up could my dreams be?

I rubbed my face, still in a funk.

 

I think I'll get myself a drink,

Thinking that my dream was funny

I see that THING at my doors brink,

And it says: "Good morning, honey..."

 

© 2013 Saichiro Wolftotem


Author's Note

Saichiro Wolftotem
I *actually* woke up after that, ALL freaked out.

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Beautiful and quirky :) love it!

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

haha this had great suspense with a dash of humor to it. A very smart write :) was a lot of fun to read.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Excellent poem. Very well written with excellent descriptions that bring the situation to life. Perhaps at the end the dream really wasn't a dream.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Saichiro Wolftotem

6 Years Ago

Much appreciated. It was INCEPTION!
Very descriptive and unique. Built up tension with a bit of creepy. Surprise! A twist of humor at the end.
I really liked this. Thanks for the smile.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Saichiro Wolftotem

6 Years Ago

^_^ Thanks for the review.
Your dream might be common for many people.
I also experienced such bizarre dreams even in my older age.
But,I could not write such vivid poem like you.
It is rhymed and enjoyable to read.
Well done.
Added to my reading list and favorites.
100/100

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Nice job.
You really made me interested as to what the beast was.
The satirical twist at the end made me walk away with a smile (rather than a frown)
great job. I enjoyed reading.


Posted 6 Years Ago


Saichiro Wolftotem

6 Years Ago

Thank you! I actually had that dream. Freaked me out so much I never forgot it.

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Saichiro Wolftotem
Saichiro Wolftotem

San Antonio, TX



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