Innocence Lost

What does not kill you makes you stronger.

Innocent eyes filled with tears

She cried and her innocence washed away.

Now a cynic she believes in none.

Broken carriage with a passenger of only one.

She rides in the cold windy roads

To an endless night her path unfolds.

 

The chilling wind cuts her skin

Bleeding charred skin from the outside 

Just like her heart on the inside.

Reaching on the highest cliff.

She drops the anvil of her.

Now there is nothing she fears.

As she sheds her old, dried sins

At long last the sun rises.

And she is the one who wins.

Author's Note

Reviews are welcome.

Reviews

[Tai Ryens]

A shattered girl who turns into a temporary cynic and eventually surpasses all turmoil to emerge as someone different, no longer a cynic, happy, now. Wondrous tale of a girl coming to terms with herself and "shedding" her old self away, a pursuit of happiness, in some way. Well done.

[New Theory]

Thank you TR. Indeed a pursuit to happiness.

[FlamingPhoenix]

You lost me in the middle, but the first stanza was sheer perfection!

[New Theory]

Thank you Phoenix :)

[Mary Ochoa]

Wow. I feel that I can relate to this poem and overall amazing read. Great poem! :)

[New Theory]

Thanks so much Mary :)

[Mary Ochoa]

You're Welcome! :)

[melissa]

Amazing poem keep up the great work and keep sending me more to read i love reading them

[Rachelle]

Mistakes. Regret. Self-contempt. Acceptance. Forgiveness. Movement. - Transformational.

No other words, N.T. Great write!

Plant Girl

[New Theory]

Thank you so much science lady, Plant Girl, Mara, Miss Wood, Rachelle :)

[Rachelle]

………:)………..

[Utkarsh Singh]

i like ur closing line very much ....

Now there is nothing she fears.
As she sheds her old, dried sins
At long last the sun rises.
And she is the one who wins.

gud one ..waitng for more......

[New Theory]

Thanks for the review man :)

[Utkarsh Singh]

my pleasure ........:D

[Miles W.]

Very beautiful poem man! It shows the power of pain that life can have, but it also shows the power that a person has to overcome it and move forward! That is very rare to see in poems similar to this one. Well done sir!

[New Theory]

Thank you Miles, I must apologize I havent been able to review much stuff lately.

[Madalyn Beck]

I really enjoyed this! No matter how battered down and broken inside we may feel, we can conquer whatever is put in our paths. All we have to do is try. Great write with an excellent message! (:

[New Theory]

Thank you Madalyn, human spirit is often unbreakable :)

[Quianna]

What a nice poem you wrote, way to go! :D

[New Theory]

Thank you Quianna.

[Lyn Anderson]

This is a really great piece. A couple minor suggestions - Now cynical, or Now a cynic, and perhaps drop off her rather than off of her. But the imagery is powerful and the form and font complimentary to the piece.

[New Theory]

Thanks KLGoode for your review, I will be changing it right away.

[Lyn Anderson]

No problem. That's what this peer review is all about.