Tired Eyes

I dismiss it as a lack of sleep,

Buts its so hauntingly more deep.

A little shut eye just subsides my shame.

But a lack of devotion ,

And life’s unfriendly motions,

Make every nights’ journey the same.

 

I’m pining for pleasure,

But unyielding weather,

Keeps blowing my chances away.

With good chance that I’m lonely,

Its my bed that will hold me,

And keep me away from the day.

 

What might have been,

Just wont let me win.

I’ve been laying here for more than a week.

But its here that ill stay,

Sleeping my tired eyes away,

Until my outlook stops looking so bleak.

 

Now I’m cold from lack of being dressed,

And my back hurts from this old mattress,

So ill hurl myself onto the floor.

And walk outside into the world,

To have a smoke and to explore,

All the things that I’ve thought

But will dwell on no more.

Author's Note

im not really sure what i think of this one yet but your opinion would be nice.

Reviews

[Robin]

you always have a great ending ,

some typos ( been there done that ) second line - buts its - but its ?

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I had a great Aunt who took to her bed for 40 years!!! Better to get up and get dressed..the world awaits, nice rhyme and meter..well penned

I like the rhyme a lot actually. You have a typing error. It should be I'll. I feel your loneliness. The truth is we're all a bit lonely sometimes and going out into the world is the best cure. :). The rhyme was great too.