Under the Warden's Watchful Eye

Under the Warden's Watchful Eye

A Poem by Fanicia E.
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Metaphorical

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Both warden and prisoner are trapped within a cell
Both longing for freedom to no avail
One must watch 
The other obey
But both are trapped in a place they must stay
Although it is the warden's duty
And his prisoner has no choice
The job weighs heavy on his heart
And he feels he's lost his voice

© 2018 Fanicia E.


Author's Note

Fanicia E.
Ignore grammar. Let me know what you think.

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Since you don't post very often, I'm happy that you read request me, so I won't miss anything new you might post. This is a very thought-provoking message, as Laurierose expresses right off. I generally think of two people caught in codependency . . . in all it's many shades . . . both must play a certain role . . . both are just as imprisoned, even tho "warden" may sound like the opposite of prisoner. I love this concept & you've drizzled it on the page in an interesting pattern of observations (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 2 Years Ago


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Fanicia E.

2 Years Ago

Thank you for the read and review Margie! Codependency is definitely something that can be seen hidd.. read more



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This is a awesome piece. I can relate to this.

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Rye
Your last four lines, really intriguing and makes one think.
I like your imagery. Nicely written and expressed

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Fanicia E.

1 Year Ago

Thank you for the read and review Rye. I like when poems are relatable but still leave parts for spe.. read more
This poem is metaphorical indeed because in the real sense because the prisoner and the warder could serve as metaphors for inevitability of life and death which every mortal are bound to face. It's a metaphor standing to explain the various disappointment as a result of one's helplessness in the face of difficulty. It also goes to explain the dilemma of that man nor woman whose power of choice is under siege either by poverty,racial prejudice or as a result of servant hood. I cannot explain it all my dear. It is richly, all encompassing metaphorical poem. Kudos friend!

Posted 2 Years Ago


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Fanicia E.

2 Years Ago

Thank you Williams Ike :)
Interesting write. Reminds me of a story I read a while ago, where the warden fell in love with the prisoner, who knew one another before. The ending of the story was horrible, I feel like the author started it and dropped it for a few years then continued it just to finish it but whatever.

*cough* anyway. I enjoy the moral and message-ish of the story. The flow caught my eye and I love the way a story was just nestled in there.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Fanicia E.

2 Years Ago

Where did you read the story? Thank you, this poem was a way for me to vent about some things going .. read more
Lavi

2 Years Ago

There's no better place to vent about our lives than in writing poetry... in my opinion ;)
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Fanicia E.

1 Year Ago

I like ao3 although I don't read she as regularly there anymore
Since you don't post very often, I'm happy that you read request me, so I won't miss anything new you might post. This is a very thought-provoking message, as Laurierose expresses right off. I generally think of two people caught in codependency . . . in all it's many shades . . . both must play a certain role . . . both are just as imprisoned, even tho "warden" may sound like the opposite of prisoner. I love this concept & you've drizzled it on the page in an interesting pattern of observations (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Fanicia E.

2 Years Ago

Thank you for the read and review Margie! Codependency is definitely something that can be seen hidd.. read more
Damn, this made my mind race. I'm thinking of so many possibilities, conclusions, and messages. The immediate question that comes to mind is, "Who's the prisoner here?"

Conflict is strong in this piece. I'm lead to believe that the warden and the prisoner are the same entity at war with one another.

"One must watch." The inner
"The other obey." The body

When we're pushed into a place of doing something we really do not want to do, then we must disassociate to accomplish tasks. After a while of manipulating ourselves, we convince the mind to just watch and the body to robotically carry out.

We really are prisoners of our own minds, at times. Daring to be different is often the hardest thing to do. So we must find the lost voice of reason that was buried for so long, and speak. Thank you for such a wonderful poem. Great read, my friend.

Posted 2 Years Ago


Fanicia E.

2 Years Ago

I really like you interpretation of the poem! And so many people are afraid to be themselves because.. read more
Great poem, interesting, thoughtful and insightful. An excellent job is done Fanicia. Really makes you think and ponder on this subject even after reading the poem.

Posted 2 Years Ago


Fanicia E.

2 Years Ago

Thank you Dawn. I'm happy to know I wrote something that stays with you for a while after you read i.. read more
Interesting and thought provoking share. The Warden appears more affected, as one day the prisoner may leave; after completing their sentence (provide not a life sentence). No wonder words become lost ... :-)

Posted 2 Years Ago


Fanicia E.

2 Years Ago

Thank you for the review Phil. What you've said definitely hits close to home in terms of what was o.. read more
They must feel like that now > Money cuts = staff shortages > no one listens when they complain

Apart from that the wardens job is to lock up the convicts and attempt to keel them in order

Posted 2 Years Ago


Fanicia E.

2 Years Ago

Although that my very well be true I was speaking from a metaphorical standpoint that relates to a s.. read more
Nice restating of the old saying that it takes two to make a prison, a prisoner and a jailer.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Fanicia E.

2 Years Ago

Thank you John 😊

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Tags: pain, stress, authority, conflict, prison, warden, prisoner

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Fanicia E.

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