Love Grenade

Self-explanatory

 

 

 

Love Grenade

 

My fragmental heart beating bright,

Four chambers packed with cyclonite,

Women come and go, self-centered or kind,

Searing porcelain faces in my mind,

Lasting effects they know not of,

Leaves me with everlasting and painful love,

Bodies that coursed with explosive lust,

Turned my innocence into dust,

Chain me, cage me, the final goal,

Touches like thermite caressed my soul,

Beautiful liars and thieves that steal,

With words that wound and kisses that heal,

Even ones I wished would stay,

Pulled the pin and walked away.

 

 

 

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

what a great ending....i read me into this...i have pieces of shrapnel in my heart from those who walked away and from some i walked away from...

clever rhyme in this...and i am not a big rhyme fan...but you worked it so well..

and yes, a nice oxymoron..those "beautiful liars"--

nicely done.

[Scott Thompson]

If someone sees themselves in my writing I consider that a huge victory! Identification with others keeps loneliness at bay! Many thanks J!

[Willard Wells]

If it happens over and over, there must be some attraction that stops you from recognizing the same life repeating itself over and over. Sometimes we never escape and repeat the process over and over. We have a deep-seated desire for the process and pain. So yes we pull the pin ourselves. Nicely done. fun

[Scott Thompson]

Some individual more intelligent than myself said, "The definition of insanity is doing the same thing over and over expecting a different result". I have pondered that very idea many times...Glad you enjoyed it!

[Larq]

Searing porcelain faces...bodies that coursed with explosive lust...beautiful liars and thieves that steal...these are my favorite lines. Then the last one---a heart stopper! This piece communicated vulnerability and pain in a beautiful way. A wonderful thing to do with such strong emotion. Loved it.

[Scott Thompson]

I'm so glad you liked it...the "beautiful liars" line is my favorite also...If it gives me the "roller-coaster" feeling in my gut I am more confident others will feel it too. That is after all my intention! Thanks for the kind words to an inept inksmith.

[Neytri]

Thanks a lot for sharing such a beautiful poem. I had a good time reading it. Good job dear poet!

[Scott Thompson]

Just to be confused for a "poet" is thanks enough dear lady! Your enjoyment is my pleasure.

[Carolynn]

It sounds like a painful cry of a man who has had some bad luck with the ladies...sad but beautifully expressed - everything flows so nicely as you read it. I hope there's a diamond in the ruff somewhere out there for him :) I wrote one using the "grenade" idea as well but it was just a humorous one.

[SheWolfNLust]

absolutely breathing, I totally loved your imaginary and delightful word choices, I was left feeling totally captivated, each word touches the heart and soul and thanks for sharing xoxo