manumit...

A Poem by offbeat orator

what happened to me? where did I go?
am I happy? why don't I know?
surviving life - did I ever really live?
I feel so heavy, what did I achieve?
days go by, I feel more estranged,
it needs to stop, I need a change.
I submit to God, I let it all go,
may I find peace as I control forego.

-lyr-
Nov 30, 2016

© 2017 offbeat orator

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avant security guard

nice

very happy to read an African writer

peace

Posted 7 Years Ago

Ana Papaya

I like this message in this one a lot.
I think that you tripped on some if the flow though.
I wonder maybe if it's a language thing though. Otherwise, well done.

Posted 7 Years Ago

Laura Lynn

not sure what forego means in this last line...I want to submit, surrender to God, I feel the same way

Posted 7 Years Ago

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offbeat orator

South Africa

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i am an eclectic, esoteric artist and literarian with an appreciation for open-minded, constructive company and opinions. writing is a hobby and an outlet for me and i am always keen and looking to le.. more..