Velvet Night

Velvet Night

A Poem by Omar
"

I wrote this a few years ago. Just a fantasy.

"

I lay down on the grass
One velvet night
Examining my reflection in the glimmering stars
The clouds smell like earth
And the moon is a diamond scar
Across the sky's face

Moonlight is a silver shower
A crystal sea
A gemstone dream
An ashen seam
A colorless beam
A waterfall of foamy white
Dancing down the sky of night
Gushing down with all its might
Gliding from unreachable heights

It starts to rain
And the stars vanish into the clouds
I want to feel the water leaking through my skin
Drench myself with stardust within
My hands are gently stroking grass
Like it would a lover's hair
I caress the frigid crystalline roses
Dying slowly in the icy air

The drops of rain, hail, and snow
Colored in purple, as they start to glow
Fall into the enraged sea
As it yells and moans and beckons me

It's a monochromatic night
Where pale colors dance in the moonlit trees


Now, as I lay on the damp meadow
I slowly die away
And fade into the remaining drizzle
A fantasy I can now be part of forever
The memories of a picturesque, glacial, mystic night 
Is now branded into my mind as a chaste, pristine wonder
An amethyst getaway
Refuge of the rain
Keeping my visit a secret--

Free of my subtle, human intervention


© 2008 Omar


Author's Note

Omar
It may not be so coordinated or consistent, but you should release your imagination on this one!

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This is an amazing piece.

Each line, each word, was amazing and well chosen.

I was surprised at how beautiful the midnight sky could be best described. You have made me a very jealous writer, but who also feels blessed to have stumbled upon your piece.

Great form, amazing choice of words, amazingly painted imagery.

Wonderful write.

Posted 15 Years Ago


I sure did release my imagination, and loved the paper canvas you painted. (Anything purple catches my eye anyway, and amethyst is my favorite gemstone even though I was not born in February!) Great work as usual!

Posted 15 Years Ago


I have, I did... and saw what you saw. How beautiful each line is ...

'Moonlight is a silver shower
A crystal sea
A gemstone dream
An ashen seam
A colorless beam
A waterfall of foamy white
Dancing down the sky of night
Gushing down with all its might
Gliding from unreachable heights ' wonderful

'The drops of rain, hail, and snow
Colored in purple, as they start to glow
Fall into the enraged sea
As it yells and moans and beckons me ' so pictori, and, great metre

One little thing.. 'Like it would to a lover's hair..' - maybe omit the 'to'?

This is going into favourites. Thank you for sharing the words and the painting




Posted 15 Years Ago



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