Forevermore

Rhyming Quatrains with a Rhyming Couplet envoi poem regarding thoughts of death... Grateful to Richard for finding the perfect artwork for my poem and helping me along my journey writing poetry.

   

     Forevermore....

Lie me down on a bed of lavender;

naked, I will be in the blazing sun.

Upon death, to this earth I surrender …

for, my journey here with you is now done.

Remember my laughter in ocean's waves …

floating along with no care in the world.

As we hid inside of deep dark sea caves,

our eyes met softly, as blue waters swirled.

Kissing your salty neck, I held on tight

with loving thoughts....I drift to you again,

watching day's sun disappear into night,

knowing our true love's depth would never wane.

Beyond life, to your open arms I soar;

our souls entwine now ~ and forevermore....

Author's Note

If you happen to read my poem I would so appreciate a review.
I always review.. Each line has 10 syllables.
Thank you,
Lisa

Reviews

[C. M. Miller]

Angels folding wings around each other, with feathers to spare. Ethereal. Words escaping me, like a sweet mist kissing memories that never fade. thank you for this write.
UPDATE! 2-23-24: I recently re-read your poem. I am sorry now that I completely missed the pacing of it, the subtle rhyming that I overlooked upon my first read. The ending so subtle and sensual. Beautiful. Thank you, sincerely.

[Lisasview]

Wow, the mere fact that somehow my poem stayed with you and prompted you to reread it is well, rather amazing... Did you read my authors notes about the poem? Basically it said that I wrote this about thoughts of my own death...Hope you will have time to read more. And, I am now going to read yours,
Lisa, now in Spain

[C. M. Miller]

I recently re-read your poem. I am sorry now that I completely missed the pacing of it, the subtle rhyming that I overlooked upon my first read. The ending so subtle and sensual. Beautiful. Thank you, sincerely.

[Melinda McQueen]

How beautifully written is this.
Love lavender,
And your words made the aroma ever sweet.
Nicely penned.

[Lisasview]

Thank you so much Melinda,
I too love lavender and here in Spain (I am from California) I have a lavender garden along with many other flower areas.
This poem is about thoughts of my death
Lisa, now in Spain

[Arundass TP]

Beautiful love poem. Much feelings in it. Enjoyed reading 👍

[Lisasview]

Thank you so much for reading and reviewing my poem.
Yes, it is about love and my thoughts about dying,
Lisa

[carl]

lovely wording and structure and loving sentiment - glad I stopped by - have been trying to write of late using a syllable count - much more free with my rhyme but that is for lack of skill ( lol ) not intention. enjoyed you piece - carl

[Lisasview]

Nice to hear from you Carl... I have been sort of away from writing but I do plan on finishing up a poem soon and posting it. Glad you like this one.
Actually syllable count is quite easy... use your fingers and just make it 8 or 10 all the way through you poem...
Lisa

[carl]

Interesting you should recommend 8 or 10 syllables. My most recent one I used a 7 count. It seemed to have more of an unbalanced bite or edge which I hoped would fit with the subject. also chose to use an abcb rhyme scheme don't really know why maybe just b/c it was easier or it gave me more freedom with word choice.

[Lisasview]

Perhaps that is the case... Most of your poem was 8 or 10 so that is why I said that Carl,
Lisa

[fen]

this poem is so beautifully written, Lisa! i mean it, it is amazing and once i read the first verse, i just couldn't stop until the very last one. very comforting words, but also advocating to the roughness of nature, the contrast of love and death, light and darkness... thanks for sharing this with us!

[Lisasview]

What a fantastic review! I read this yesterday and thought i had replied... I do think I did but forgot to press Post Comment.
Thank you so much!

[Karenina]

This is a stunning verse. A sonnet to comfort all who grieve, for surely there is a brighter heavenly light beneath which we will rejoice eternally! Your envoi is simply perfect! So nice to read your work!

[Lisasview]

Wow, you certainly are Johnny on the spot. I know you will love the site. It runs so smoothly...no glitches and not actual continuous contests.
And the writers on her are true poets.
What is great is that when you review you can read all the reviews before for the poem... Makes the poem really come alive.
I am so excited that you joined.
This will be such fun.
Love to you,
Lisa

[Lisasview]

P.S. Perhaps sounds like a Sonnet, but it is a Rhyming Quatrain with a Rhyming couplet envoi.
This is the way I really write...
Goodnight,
Lisa

[Karenina]

Ah! Well, there you go! It felt as eloquent as any sonnet I've read! Thanks for referring me here, Lisa. I'm quite excited about exploring the site!

[Lisasview]

This is a fairly easy site.
I am very involved with the perfect font, color, size and image.
There are amazing icons that provide everything except the image, but that you can easily get from Google and just move one. You can easily resize the image to make it fit the way you want it to.
On thi site I have all sorts of poems... A few are seductive.....some I wrote when i ws 20 years old...
Now I am off to read yours before going to the beach, first time this year and it is only 5 minutes away! We plan to be there at 8:15 and spend two hours and then go to the gym and spa...
L

[Bhuyanshi Talukdar]

I just finished reading your poem "Forevermore" and I have to say, I am completely blown away. Your words are so powerful and evocative, and they really touched me on a deep level.
The way you use imagery to create a sense of place and mood is truly masterful. The idea of lying down on a bed of lavender is so peaceful and calming, and it really sets the tone for the rest of the poem. And the way you describe the ocean, with its waves and caves and blue waters, is so vivid and beautiful.
Your use of language is also really impressive. The way you've structured the lines, with their rhymes and rhythms, gives the poem a sense of flow and musicality that's really pleasing to read. And the way you've chosen your words, with their soft sounds and gentle alliteration, creates a sense of intimacy and tenderness that's really moving.
But what really struck me about your poem is the depth of emotion that it conveys. The way you describe the love between two people, and the way you explore the idea of life and death and what comes after, is so powerful and moving. Your words really touched my heart, and I know they will stay with me for a long time to come.
Thank you so much for sharing your gift with the world. Your poem is truly a work of art, and I feel honored to have had the chance to read it.

[Lisasview]

I just can not believe that I did not respond to your glorious review of my poem. My only excuse is that I broke my clavicle and shortly after that I broke three ribs... All of this on my right side... And, I am right handed...So, I was unable to type for quite some time.
I do remember your review and came back to it just moments ago to write you a big thank you.
I am so humbled by your gracious words my friend. You have a beautiful way of writing down your thoughts.
I have now reread my poem and your review several times and my heart is filled with joy.
Lisasview, now in Spain

[Archishman Rick]

You have expressed these lines in such a beautiful and poetic fashion that it leaves a heartfelt impression. You are welcoming your new journey with open arms, as you lie fondly inculcated with the meaningful memories, lessons and insights gained the way through. You are drifting in a divine direction, where etheric ends will meet, and spirit will ascend. In this next journey, you shall drift again with newfound grace, in a timeless travel that doesn't map destinations, but sets destinies through boundless horizons. The colours will flow and dance again in each new creative rhythm, as fresh realities bloom, in the afterglowing essence of the bygone experience.
Kind regards,
Archishman Rick Dasgupta

[Lisasview]

You message is so beautiful...much like a poem itself... I plan on keeping this and receding it often..forever...
Thank you so much for truly understanding the meaning of my poem.
Lisa

[Archishman Rick]

My pleasure :) A lovely piece to read