Fleeting or Found: Moments I could not breath

It was only the reoccurring sights that took her breath away 

Subways roaring by

Ocean waves slamming against the shore

And passionate men that were meant to stay forever

Reviews

[Revery]

The best of life always seems just out of reach. I love how you expressed this thought. Beautifully written.

[Relic]

It was only the reoccurring sights that took her breath away

(This line is vague without maybe a colon pointing to the next lines.)

Subways roaring by (Where? do you mean subway cars?)


Ocean waves slamming against the shore (Where?)


And passionate men that were meant to stay forever
(What kind of men? Romantic men? Brave men? Family men?