Bloodstream.

I hope this works. // Second shot. // Photo not mine.

I miss you before you even drown.

I miss you before emotions flash in your eyes.

Hatred, disgust, takes you down,

The sound of your bones and screaming cries.

I miss you before your smile turned frown.

And no one seems to care to pry.

I miss you before the blade touches your skin.

And I couldn't do anything.

You're too far and I don't know where I stand.

I'm too scared, and we both need help.

Standing before a mirror, I see myself.

Before I could scream, I'm already lying in a bloodstream.

Author's Note

Simple words, from a simple girl.

P.S I don't feel confident about the title. Better ideas? Anyone? c:

Reviews

[yvo miki]

best of friends (title) and this poem is simple but very strong good work!!!

[ali]

oh so you see friendship on this one? :D I knew poems could mean different things in different views. Thanks so much anyway. :3

[Jeyanthi]

Simple words yet it ached with pain... beautifully written!

I wish you may sound better now. :)

[ali]

oh I do. I am a lot better now. More mature and reasonable, but of course, I sometimes forget. Thank you, btw. c:

[Jeyanthi]

All does :P

Keep updating! :D

[catwoman]

hmm, i think this title is good :) i really like the poem..it's so deep and heart felt :)

[ali]

Do you happen to listen to ed sheeran? c:

[catwoman]

yes i do listen to him..why?

[ali]

well, his title song, "bloodstream", happens to be the inspiration behind this poem's title. 😂

[catwoman]

oh cool :) i really loved that song :)

[ANTO]

How about 'Shattered' - as a title?
I thought this dealt with the subject matter well - not overly-dramatic which actually added to the drama - less is more.

Good writing A x.

[ali]

Oh wow. Thanks! c: I think I'll use that.

And yeah I have no idea how I did that. Lol. I appreciate your time reading this one. :D

[Isabel25]

I liked the title. Got reminded of "Love the way you Lie". U sound disturbed- but not in a bad way. They are not simple words my dear, they contain a lot of meaning. A good second shot :) Keep going!

[ali]

always there to comfort me c"; Haha. It is depressing. May I hear your thoughts about this one? Like what does this poem means to you? I'm just a curious girl, always thought that a poem can mean different things to each person. :)

[Isabel25]

Lol..What is depressing?

Well..I felt that you are involved with a really disturbed person, or it could even be a part within you. You know it/he/she needs help but u can't do anything as it/he/she won't let you in.
I could also sense a love-hate relationship in this poem.
This is just my interpretation. I am just another simple girl like you :)

[ali]

I don't know. I was depressed when I wrote this. Some sort of a suicide poem I made. And yes, that disturbed person might be me. :D Glad to hear we're on the same boat.

[Isabel25]

It's not just me and you..most of them in this community are in the same boat :) Hope you feel better soon.

[ali]

I am better. Good enough to share this to this community. c: Thanks.