wine and roses

I'll hold my breathe cause I'm leaving here
my memories and demons collide
I'll hold my chest cause I'm losing it
my faith and my eyes

 

every word gives birth to the next
orphaned vowels going wild
my throat is sore from repeating its sound
a lost crooked child

 

but it's not what you think

 

all my days are shaded with spite
I'm a cloak over the truth
hiding the scars that are evident
of how I've been drugged and used

 

I still smile though my toes are cold
I know things won't be so unknown
just blocks of tile from where I've been before
asleep but not at home

 

but it's not what you think

 

 

Reviews

[Last Lying Look]

Ah, this is amazing.
"I'll hold my chest cause I'm losing it
my faith and my eyes"
There's something about that line that I just love.
It's something that;s going to be running through my head all day now.
"I'll hold my chest cause I'm losing it
my faith and my eyes"
Excellent write!
-Elissa

[Nae Nae]

True words, this what not what I though it would be. Wine and roses is a title that causes most to believe the piece will be sensual, erotic, maybe even sexual. Not a hurtful scene of words that bring us to really think, not about our desires but about the truth and honesty in things. I really admire this, "don't judge a book by it's cover" that's what I always say. I love this, not deceit but truth and honesty. Beautiful.

Nae-Nae ...

[Naomi Montana Walsh]

I am not sure what I think.. but I think your poetry has some very deep meaning to it and it works for me ..I am not sure I giving it another meaning other than ..it seems a stream of thoughts.

[Bella]

"I'm a cloak over the truth
hiding the scars that are evident
of how I've been drugged and used"

My favorite part. Great, great write! I loved reading this.

[Kiara]

exceptional poetry
no more is needed to be said
for you have written everything
perfectly : )
i truly enjoyed reading this
thank you for sharing!
-arabella

[Michael X]

If you could present a consistant rhyme form, that paced with meter, this would be Wow,
as it it, i found it good, the line breaks set nicely, the flow was a bit bumpy, lacking syllable structure,
all in all, not bad, thanks for sharing your talent.

[hey]

beautiful. i love the second stanza most. i felt this man.

[Sun Dog]

I enjoyed reading this. It is well written and normally I don't like rhyming poems but yours is really good! It is deep and meaningful.