scared

scared

A Poem by paul

scared to backflip
out of my mind

it's a strange universe to swim in
if you're not a fish

© 2011 paul


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...
indeed
the backflip
is the toughest
flip for a non-fish

Posted 13 Years Ago


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And yet such beauties soar in this strange universe!
You got me completely backflipped...wonderful:)

Posted 13 Years Ago


joy to the fishes in the deep blue sea
joy to you and me

i dunno, it just popped right out when i read your piece

Posted 13 Years Ago


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You are a gifted writer..you have such a charming way with words.Indeed it is a strange universe to swim in if you are not a fish.

Posted 13 Years Ago


Ok, so Paul is an existentalist minimalist (I may be making that term up) so keeping in that vein I will review all his work here. Brilliant in the choice of minimum words that capture maximum thoughts, and thoughts upon thoughts. The evidence of its excellence is the poem is far shorter than this review...and I said not nearly as much.

Posted 13 Years Ago


Love these metaphors, they're exquisite in both stanzas.

Posted 13 Years Ago


Interesting. " it's a strange universe to swim in if you're not a fish." the world/universe is a scary place, especially if your different. at least it's my interpretation

Posted 13 Years Ago


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LOL...surreal

Posted 13 Years Ago


I love how simple yet intriguing this is. It's also very easy to relate to, which is great for the reader.

Posted 13 Years Ago


How plain and unapologetic. I admire your pluck and courage, may we see grea things from you in future?, yes I think we can!

Posted 13 Years Ago



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