More than Nobody's Sweetheart.

the weekday crush

that pressing rush

it drags on like the 5 o clock bus

but it's 9 to 5 on friday

and after that i'm free

i've clocked out of work

and now it's time for me.

i pick up that old telephone

and call some friends of mine,

they say

hey how ya doin, let's hang out sometime

how about i call you back, say, by a quarter to nine.

and i say yeah sure sounds like a plan,

until then, i'll just call my man.

i pick up the phone once again to call--

oh wait, that's right, i have no man at all.

so i slink to the kitchen, just to pass the time

and now it's getting late,

i hope they'll call me, but i guess for now i'll eat some key lime

pie cake cookies ice cream.

the calories climb as i sit until nine,

i decide to pick up my phone

and call some friends of mine.

it rings five times

no answer

but that's fine, i'll just give them a little more time

they're probably just busy

all the

seven people

that wanted to hang out sometime.

so a while passes

and it's still the same

no call, no answer

maybe i'm just lame.

maybe i'm just a nobody,

a loser at best.

but then again, who wants to hang out with

someone who's probably a pest.

 

 

Reviews

[Brjden (Bridge-Den) Cre..]

This was great! It held me to the end which was mildly depressing but very relatable. You tell a story in rhyme and that's difficult to do at times but your cadence and flow was very readable and entertaining!

"and i say yeah sure sounds like a plan,
until then, i'll just call my man.
i pick up the phone once again to call--
oh wait, that's right, i have no man at all.
so i slink to the kitchen, just to pass the time
and now it's getting late,
i hope they'll call me, but i guess for now i'll eat some key lime
pie cake cookies ice cream."

Your visuals are incredible! I'm glad you invited me to this one. Great write!