For the Love of Copper Coins

This is a poem I wrote recently. It's a bit dark.

Master of the skies
God's tiny, feathered spies
Watch with shiny, beady eyes
From the heavens on high

Tell your master I know
Every fallen sparrow 
Is worth less than the hairs on my head
A penny for every two dead

Buy one get one free
Each that tumbles from the tree
The mighty deity decrees
Do what pleases me

Loyal creature you are
Stone in hand, I aim from afar
Falling speck against the dark sky
Getting my small piece of the pie

Reviews

[A. Z. Anthony]

This poem has a pleasant rhythm and smooth flow. It is quirky and I found that to be both enjoyable and suitable to the mood the poem creates.
To me, it hints at a darker world than the one we live in, a gloomier place where you have to live however you can. Perhaps I'm totally wrong. Or, perhaps this is a description of a person's state of mind. It gives off an aura of the mind of a character who is missing a few marbles.
Any which way, it is quirky and entertaining.
-A.Z.

[Scarlet]

A little quirky and dark, suitable from a courage the cowardly dog fan... It was well written, interesting and has a good rhythm to it.

P.S. I like sparrows.

[Rose F.]

Dark yet very beautiful. The rhyme scheme really flows. I like it!