LIFE

the poem of how life begins and ends

 

 

           How life begins and ends

 

                           life is the little thing that begins and ends

                           mom and dad in love

                           create a baby thats like there sweetest dove

                           the baby is born unto its crib

                            and then it sits and waits for its mommas kiss

 

                           the little baby grows to a boy

                           who likes to play with his big bad toys

                           the boys momma tries to calm him down

                            but all she ended up with was a messy clown

                            the mother cleaned him up with a dry towel

                             then the boy stubbed his toe followed by a howl

                             the worried mother comforted her boy

                             then he got up and played with his toy

 

                             soon the boy turned into the teenager

                             he found girls and could hit a c magor

                             he had good grades and had a car

                             he felt powerful just like a star

                             he comes home from school to see his mom

                             she asks him "what are you going to wear to the prom?"

                              he answers quickly just like a cat

                              "im going to wear my jacket with a pin of a baseball bat

 

                              soon the teenager turned into a man

                              he was out of work and had no plan

                              untill a man in a white striped jacket came up and asked

                              "would you like to be in a group of men who are tasked?"

                               so the man said "well what does that mean?"

                               "it means we steal money from the blue collar greens"

                                so the man joined up with them and on his first day on the job

                                the mans life was robbed.

                                so there sat the mother atop her loveseat

                                she was crying so hard she could thaw out frozen meat

                                so i hoped you like this poem i know it all depends

                                life is the little thing that begins and ends

                             

                          

Author's Note

please ignore the spelling and grammer issues. i know i skipped the colledge stage but it wasnt important.

Reviews

[Mistral Bilgera]

the very truth, Jerry! :) wonderful observation, transitions and the uncommon depiction of what a "common life" is. like it

[lady o]

truth in life demonstrated in this poem... nice work, emotive ~~ I like it

[MarchAprilMayJuneJuly]

hehh.. it's it just inevitable how everything ends?? gosh i hate it!!! well, not your piece, this was reallly good!!! i liked the flow of it!!

awesome!

~may (i'm really melody-ur sis)

[Hannah!]

This was cool. I love "the boys momma tries to calm him down/ but all she ended up with was a messy clown". It gave me an image of a little kid with spaghetti dumped all over his head; I have no idea why. At any rate, it was really cute.

There are times when the rhyming seems forced, such as the lines "He answered quickly just like a cat/'I'm going to wear my jacket with the pin of a baseball bat.'" Not only did the rhyming seem awkward, but I'm not entirely sure what that second line means--the pin of a baseball bat? I also thought the line "she was crying so hard she could thaw out frozen meat" was a bit...I don't know. It seemed to fall short of the feeling you were trying to convey, almost like the line existed solely so that you could keep the rhyme scheme up.

I love the last line, though. It's kind of a cool way to think about life. Good poem!

[Lil redneck princess]

amazing

[Lil redneck princess]

thats super amazing i so love it


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[That Weirdo You Just Mi..]

OMFG!!!!!!!!!!! I love it Jerry it is awesome!!!