Truth Be Told

Promises and compromises

All it turned out to be

I deserve better

That much I can see

 

You gave me half

And kept the whole

You tried to feed me

From an empty bowl

 

You said I should be full

After dining only on air

Even if you had given

Just a morsel of care

 

My heart would have filled up

It probably would have burst

Instead I washed nothing down

With a cup full of thirst

 

Craving, and ranting

I felt myself go insane

The truth wasn't even bitter

It was just terribly plain

 

You loved the look of love

More than you loved me

Just the façade you liked to show

For all the world to see

 

I was your paper doll

You never bothered to unfold

There was always more to me

Now the truth be told

Reviews

[erlance]

Lovely. So much emotion unravels throughout the poem, until you finally break the glass with the last two lines. Reading this, I could feel the chains that were put on the persona, finally breaking free in the end, realizing that there was more to them, and they were caged by being around someone that suppressed their ability to be themselves. SO very relatable.

My favorite stanza is the 5th, specifically the first line. I love the break up using the comma - it really makes the words dance.

For a critique: The only thing that kept me from fully enjoying the poem is the absence of punctuation. Just a few more commas or periods at the end of thoughts or phrases could add to the power of the poem.

Amazing job!

-Erlance