Electric Eyes

A short, simple poem i really like.

I met you, and was lost

in your electric eyes.

Every soul falls upon another.

Yours fell upon mine.

Reviews

[Eliana Johnson]

Well you could add on to it like you said you don't know how to and nether do I. I wouldn't be able to add on it it but you thought of it you must finish it


oh but I have some cool poems you can read.


and your views can read them to if they want

[Goodbyeguilt]

Damnit.
I am envious.
It takes me an entire bloody poem with half a dozen paragraphs to write down one bloody sentiment and you conquer lurve in three lines. What a talent!
I loved the electric eyes bit, it seems that I always notice a person's eyes when I like them.
The eyes are after all supposed to be the window to the soul ... not entirely sure I agree with that.

Either way, a big 'Awww bless, totally sweet dude' from me.
Well done!

GBG - Leah

[Robin Ann]

i LOVE short poems with lots of meaning. and this is definitely short with a lot of meaning. it has a lot of beauty within it. i would actually think about making shorter and it might look more organized.

[Hedra Helix]

It does get stuck in your head:) Nice arrangement of lyricsm and natural melody

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

What a beautiful short poem and thoughts.. electric eyes.. nice line..

Chloe
xoxo

[Emma]

This is gorgeous, soft, deep and sensual :)

[John Tom]

i love it short and sweet, now it's stuck in my head. thank you ;)