Save me

Save me

A Poem by Sarah
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A person is broken

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As you can see, I am fading away,

A beat up heart that won’t stop bleeding.

A torn up sole with things still to say,

My mind isn’t leading.

I’m lost and can’t find my way,

I have lost my voice to say.

Can you put me back together?

Will you stay with me forever?

© 2013 Sarah


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A lovely little verse, Sarah, one that seems to seek healing for a broken and shattered soul. Ah, but therein lies the rub, for you have written "sole" instead. Is this to indicate a sewing up of this tormented soul, a "repair" of sorts? Or, was it simply a typo, and confounded confusion between the very different meaning of a homonym? Only you would know that for certain, as it could be interpreted both ways.

Good work, and a lovely presentation.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Nice write, though I found one error that may not be an error if you did this intentionally:

A torn up sole with things still to say,

You said "sole" (as in the bottom of a shoe) instead of "soul" (as in the human consciousness) but I suppose the bottom of a shoe would work in this piece. I'm not sure whether this is a mistake or not. Anyway, good write and kudos to you!

Posted 7 Years Ago


Sarah

7 Years Ago

Thanks no it wasnt intentional I will correct that

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Added on December 29, 2013
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Sarah
Sarah

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I am english and am 16 years old. I was born on 13th march. I live in washington in england. I write poems, short stories. books I like: Morganville vampires Fallen twilight harry potter. Fr.. more..

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