Live...

poem about life

know what u are, see what u can become, live what u can feel
shape your words to run threw the feilds of the unknown
bend your memories like the world bends your emotions
know what u want, see what u have, live for tomorrow

trust in yourself, keep all your hope, jump into your faith
hold yourself to a promise that u know u cant keep
function with your soicity but keep your truths close
trust in love, keep ur breaths, jump into disillusion

cry with your angels, sit with your demons, and live
bleed out the shouts of your inner youth like rebel
put your service in that of which you dont know
cry with your enemies, sit with injustice, and live

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Erin]

"shape your words to run threw the feilds of the unknown." Shouldn't it be, "shape your words to run through the fields of the unknown"? Just a thought on grammar...
I enjoyed this poem a lot. It really says something and touches me on a level I can't comprehend yet. I definitely think that this poem is amazing. The way you wrote it, the tone you took, it's relaxed, yet forceful, strong, yet shows that every human has a weak spot. I like how you said "u" instead of "you." It really helped with the tone.
Good job. I like this one...a lot.
PBP

[Dusk's Dream. Dawn's Ho..]

I loved the flow of this piece. It was captivating from the start/ Made me think about how it relates to a lot of the things in my own life. Excellent Job!

[Jim Lozkittle]

Keep on going and never give up on yourself, I like your message again, how doubt the fact that you have to live with everything going on around you still have to live. I lked it alot, and the rhymes just seem to go together like they were made for it

[Coyote Poetry]

There are few enemies in a life. A smile and a handshake still can open doors to friendship and end of hate. Each of us want the same. To be left alone to do great things. I like the flow of your poem and the hope in your words. Last line is true and powerful. I was a Soldier for 15 years. Other country Soldier respect their counterparts and when rather drink a cup of coffee or beer with you then kill another. A outstanding poem.
Coyote