Fiery Anger

I'm angry at you
I am pissed as hell
The fiery side starting to swell

Go ahead ignore me
Pretend you don't care
Now the dark side is starting to flare

I want you to notice
And treat me with respect
Not throw me aside with needless neglect

Want the same care
That all your friends get
Don't pretend I'm insignificant, I don't exist

Shutting me out
Not talking for days
my mind seeing red in an aggressive haze

I don't pretend
That you aren't there
I show the world that I do care

I give you respect
That I do all my friends
On this issue I will not be flexible or bend.

You could act
Like you do care
That in your life, as a friends, we do share

I'm not asking
For you to love me back
Only acknowledgment the friendship, that fact

Wow, is all I can say
Being mad and fiery at you
Brings on  a whole new meaning to attitude!

Reviews

[alesuriko]

Experimentation with color, I like it, although I think this poem could be good without the use of color, I find it almost distracting but it does put a good emphasis to it. The flow isn't perfect but that almost adds to the anger behind the poem that is doesn't matter about flow because anger and rage are often expressed erratically.

There are some grammar issues that hindered the flow a bit for me. In the third to last stanza you have "as a friends" the plural with "a" throws it off a bit. And "Only acknowledgment the friendship" doesn't quite sound right.

Good poem though. Many people can relate to it.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Love and friendships are always a two way street or should be... I must say you show a lot of spunk here despite the pain of feeling like nothing. I say stand up and be counted.

[Bette]

i like this.... now i am mad...

[The Water Queen]

This i can relate to. Having an ex act completely hateful to me. Once again the way you incorporate colors into your poems is a brilliant and fun idea. The flow kept me reading.

[Sean M. Addams]

i like this alot the different color in this was a nice touch and adds alot to the piece...overall a very deep and well expressed piece... ending was great..nice job.

[Jenny Nelson]

Very good! I can really identify with this and someone specific came to mind... must be a lot like him out there. You really put a lot of emotion into a very expressive piece. Liked this a lot.

[Subjective Sanity]

I LOVE IT!!!!!!!!!!! Especially this line:

On this issue I will not be flexible or bend.

[Cricket Kidd]

I can totally relate to someone I care about treating me like I don't exist, It happened to me for eight years, sad really.

I like how you used different colors in this piece, it gives it more..... I want to say feeling, yeah! thats the word. it gives it more feeling. thanks!

[Jeff Miller]

WOW! This poem is amazing! Such passion displayed on an intense, but relateable scale! This was almost unnerving, because it almost seems like it could be a retalitory response to a poem I have recently written in the last few weeks. Keep up the amazing work!!!!