November Lane

November Lane

A Poem by Poetic Beauty

The moon is full, shining with all its glory
the stars twinkle on the clear November night
A truly beautiful magical sight

The chilled air reddens my bare cheeks
the slight breeze blowing dishevels stands of hair
And I ponder do you really still care

Unknowing gives me, a glimmer of hope
Keeping the heart still intact, almost whole
Except for the half of it you quietly stole

Or maybe it was forever given away
Doesn't really matter on the how or why
Just that this blazing love, I can't deny

Wind blowing, shaking reality into view
Fingers cold from the freezing night air
Memory lane vanished, but still I care

© 2011 Poetic Beauty


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It really does touch you so much.
Its so subtle and calm, it moves you with every word. You're word choice is really nice, and the structure is really good too.

But if i have to be nit-picky; i'd say having so many commas ruins the flow. Like you have this beautiful rhyme going on in the last two lines of the stanza and having a comma in there, personally, ruins it. This is just my opinion, but consider it. It isn't the point where you want your reader to pause

But that doesn't stop this from being a great read : )

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Carefully crafted poem; moving.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Very well put, that the memories of the good times are there along with the feelings. also that you have not given up on hope!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I like how this comes together, defiantly true love, no matter what.
Excellent write.


Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

i like thinking in the cold. When you can “hear“ silence. Its a good way to figure life out.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

You can neither control or deny love... sometimes it comes easy, sometimes it comes hard but it takes hard work by two people to make it real and lasting.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I like this one too! True love!!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

There's just something about staring up at the stars. It stops you in your tracks. I have this happen at 5am when I start my car in the Winter. You realize how insignificant you are in the universe. As your poem explains, you are lost in thought for a while. This is nice and accesible to any reader.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

An excellent piece, Kristina. The rhyming scheme you use here is original, and is carried off well. The entire piece reminds me a bit of the song Raglan Road, so there is your semi-random song suggestion of the day. I thinks it because of that similarity that I got a bit of dual nature from the piece, unable to tell if the two were coming together or drifting apart. Good work as always.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

it is good to let these things out,and doing it poeticly only shows true beauty inside the author by letting it go in such a creative way...
Well Done...LonelySoul

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Despite the descript colds I feel a great sense of warmth throughout. Nicely done.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Poetic Beauty
Poetic Beauty

corn country, IL



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