Consider the alternative for Angel in my pocket

Pantoum

 

Consider the alternative.

 

I don’t regret that I am old.

When I look back I clearly see.

The things that fate chose to withhold

I had to accept finally.

When I look back I clearly see.

 That all your dreams cannot come true.

I had to accept finally

you can’t argue with fate’s decree.

That all your dreams cannot come true

 although perhaps you thought they would.

You can’t argue with fates decree

 and fate decreed they never would.

It’s for the best that they did not

although perhaps you thought they would.

When I look back I clearly see

I don’t regret that I am old.

 

11-Jul-08

 

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Reviews

[Leah Simone]

Woven very well. One small detail: The things that fare chose to withhold (perhaps fate instead of fare)
Yes, what we want and what is best for us and those directly effected by our lives - are often much different.You said it well, but it felt as if you were doing a word puzzle more than sharing your emotional truth, in both poems I've read of yours - the form imposes itself to the point of dominating it. Such forms are difficult to use because of the reduncy demanded and one must use the repitition like terraced dynamics to add intensity, not become a predictable echo. I hope my comment doesn't come across too harshly -- I'd simply rather read something written without restriction from you - to hear your voice more clearly.

[Tomás Ó C..]

Thats a great way to be... old without regreats. No use crying over what is done

[Fran Marie]

Words of wisdom my friend~ growing old is a good thing when you consider

the alterative, indeed!~ so many young people that have died young and aging

they will never see~Well expressed and wonderfully penned~Fran Marrie

[Ray Hamilton]

Not old just much wiser
I enjoyed this write
Ray

[angelinmypocket]

How come I get the feeling this was planted just for me? It feels as if you know me as well as I know myself. I'm well aware that all I've lived for all my life is now behind me and I must make the most of what is here and now...only living for today and hoping for tomorrow....and why is it I just happend to choose "angelinmypocket" for a pen name?
Love/Liz/angelinmypocket

[Windy]

Wow, that was a wonderful poem. I truly enjoyed reading it. You are a very talented writer I see. Such perfection in the flow, formating, rhyme, just everything. It is definatly a message to make one think. Thank you for such a great read. ;)