Traitor

A poem about knowing people are hiding something cruel from you read it if you wna knw more! :-D

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Be a fighter

 

Chin high

Soul gone

 

Ice cold eyes

Nothing won

 

They'll never know

And you'll never tell

All that has happened

To you in that hell

 

Didn't they see

What could happen there

 

With nothing allowed

And no room for fear

 

I'll bet they say no

And always deny

 

The truth that we know

When we look in their eyes

 

As our soul cries

Reviews

[Cwortknee]

This is a very powerful and thought provoking write. Well composed! Thanks for sharing.

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

always my pleasue C.Knee

[KAOlmsted]

The word is traitor...unless you're speaking French ;-)

I liked the flow of this piece, and the obvious emotion you've managed to capture in the prose. Good work.

-kimmer

;-) atta girl.

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

thanx I fixed the title and learned a little french in the process lol

[beautiful dreamer]

i like your ryhmne! very well written poem! so powerful

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

thanx so much! :-)

[Ees]

Interesting poem.
It flows well.
I am still looking for the Traiter though...

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

I thought it was obvious " the truth that we know when we look in their eyes"

[Ees]

hmmmm...
I didn't see that.
The truth is the traitor?

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

theyre the traiter they know the pain you've been though yet they say noting and and plead ignorance of it all never trying to stop it

[Anjelica Allen]

I love your rhyme scheme here. It adds to the poem I think.
The encouragement behind it also just makes me like this poem a lot.
It's a neat piece, and I will be checking out more of your work :)

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

thanx so much Anj! I look forward to hearing you'r opinion. Most of my poems have a similar rhyme scheme as the one here more or less. I like to think that most of my poems are the type that give emotional support.

[Jordan's Back]

The truth that we know,
When we look in their eyes
As our soul cries

Beautiful!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

aww thanx so much! it means so much that ppl like this it always makes me so emotional.

[Gray Witch]

Very nice...Thanks for sharing

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

always happy to share :-)

[Blue Ivory]

This is dark and powerful. It sends a strong message and is inspiring too. I love the last line!

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

aww than siren! it resonates with me a lot so I;m glad you could appreciate it 2! :-D

[Christopher Booyakasha]

thats was really great! like it