lil horror child

poem about a childs soul being tormented into insanity because of the cruelty around her

 

 

Little one

You sit so still

 

With Blank

And empty eye

 

I've seen you everyday

 

Slouch down

Begin to cry

 

Big, Blank sky above you

Rain smears sorrow

Down your face

 

Skin turns Blue

And heart turns Black

 

Bursts; leaves no bloody trace

 

Crazy girls hear voices

Wretched Whispers

In their heads

 

Horror girls

Will scream inside

Until they fall down, Dead

 

 

© 2012 Emily Dickinson Jr.  All rights reserved

Reviews

[Helena]

Horrific imagery Emily! Spooky, dark and very scary.

Thank you for submitting this to my gothic contest.

[Nemesis G]

Brilliant poem, very well done I love your choice of words it was eerie and haunting. "With blank and empty eye" fantastic line.

[Deron Alexis]

very well done nice metaphors cool flow really haunting makes me read more you know how poems make you want to read the next line very well done

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

thanx so much!! I'm glad it caught such a good flow

[Rob Santana]

You sit down with a blank and empty eye. I really like your choice of words in that line.this is a pretty dark write. Well written. I can't believe how many poems you have. I look forward to reading more of your work.

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

Im rly glad you liked it creeper I had a feeling youd be able to appreciate it. I do have a lot don't I hehehe I actually dont write often in fact abput 90% of the posted material is stuff I wrote in middle school though this one is one the more recent ones. just as you look forward to reading I look forward to hearing about you reading them it comforts me so ^.^ ps. its a dark write but I can at times be a dark person though I cnt show my mom this ( whenever she sees my poetry she tries to send me to a councelor)

[Rob Santana]

Haha I understand hiding your dark writes from your mom. My opinion it's the best thing to do. With the way the world is today parents tend to jump to crazy conclusions. Right away parents think either your insane,possessed or suicidal. But never do they think CREATIVITY!!!

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

exactly!!

[Deron Alexis]

lol my mom does not even know i have a note book of poems and she's not really computer literate so i'm safe for now

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

lucky you lol

[Jordan's Back]

This is a Wonderfully Written Piece. Its Spookiness and Macabre content Grips you as the Sudden reality creeps in and you realize. This is reality. Excellent Job especially with : Crazy Girls hear voices, Wretched whispers, In their heads

EPIC!

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

I'm so glad you liked it! its a personal favorite of mine :-) though my mom tried to send me to a psycologist for writing this one lol in all actuality it is based off real memories of mine though

[Jordan's Back]

Well Most people Read My Stuff and Trip out too, Read Insomnia :)

[David the writer]

I know a horror girl. muhahahah, great job!


-Co-founder of Never ending night,
Dracula

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

rofl thanx dracula :-D

[David the writer]

It's np. Thank you for sharing some fear muhahahahaaaa

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

always a pleasure to share a little darkness ;-)

[David the writer]

couldn't agree more ;)

[Sheila Kline]

I agree that it sounds like a horror type nursery rhyme. I can almost see a group of children, holding hands, and then picking which one is going to be "dead" when they spin in a circle! (not literally, of course....lol - a game)
Well crafted with picture and font style to accent the bold nature of your words!!

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

I'm so glad you enjoyed this!! It's a personal favorite of mine and it can disturb some with delicate sensabilities. I actually know a nursery ryme like that it's called kagome, kagome its in japanese though and is nothing like mine though lol

[Dr. Wood ?]

it reads like some macabre nursery rhyme....pretty compelling

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

thanx! Its one of my favorite :-)

[Val Dohren]

Dark, deep and mysterious. Quite a read.

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

thanx so much its a personal favorite of mine :-)

[Andrew N. Farrens]

interesting.....

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

thanx .....