Contentment

A perfect evening.

It's a beautiful summer evening,

Not a single cloud in the sky,

A gentle bird song excites the ear,

A gorgeous tune so unique so rare.

The warmth from the sun fulfils the heart,

As the slightest breeze runs through your hair,

Shades over your eyes and a drink in your hand,

Results in an evening oh so grand.

The comfort of home,

An array of friends,

All here together,

Sharing memories forever.

It's six o'clock on a beautiful summer evening,

Not a single cloud in the sky,

Surrounded by good company and genuine laughter,

And that is a true feeling of contentment.

Reviews

[emipoemi]

....I had a bit of a double take after I read this, for it aint summer where most of the WC is right now. We're freezing our socks off, thank you.....

I kid. I quite enjoyed this poem. Made me feel it's summer right now (even though it's midwinter where I am). It flows nicely, the narrative is sweet, and I quite enjoyed your decision on how to rhyme it. Worked well. If I may, I would suggest to shave a few syllables from the last stanza. For starters, the time is arbitrary, and adds nothing to the poem. In fact, it would be much more powerful to do a direct repetition. "It's a beautiful summer evening/Not a single cloud in the sky". Next, the "Surrounded" could be shortened to "In": "In good company, with genuine laughter" then with a dash (don't be afraid of punctuation, for they help a lot with meaning), head to the next line with a bang: "That is the true feeling of content". (although I would consider changing "feeling" to "meaning" for a bit of power). Well done!

[Phoebe Taylor]

I'm so glad you enjoyed it! And thank you very much for your feedback, it's really neat seeing things from a different point of view.

[emipoemi]

it was my pleasure.

[Duncan Brown]

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[WillaDanvers]

This has a sweet tune to it. Reaching the end, I couldn't help but smile for the contentment experienced was well portrayed in this piece. Great write :)

[Phoebe Taylor]

Thank you for your kind words :)