'Til Forever Is Done

You must live in the present, launch yourself on every wave, find your eternity in each moment. - Thoreau

when the night falls

and the whipporwill calls

come meet me down in the park

worry not if it's lonely and dark

you'll find me where the birds drink from puddles of yesterday's rain

where passersby hide and feign

eyes buried in cell phones as they try to lay claim

reaching out from the day's disdain

we'll convene 'neath the trees

the ones with the large leaves

with nothing and everything up their sleeves

making believe

affirming life's ins and outs with the each deep, drawn breath of the accordian

from the long forgotten royal era of the edwardian

protected by the shield and broadsword of sir real

gorging ourselves on a befitting buffet of all that a person can possibly feel

we'll dance to the flutist's rustic riff, if only in our hearts

mourning a broken promise's death

celebrating with the tattletaling tambourine of testimony from the crickets' chorus of chirps

not just on this earth

but where all of creation joins hands and sings

in heaven's kingdom come

along with everything it brings

united in truth as one

sipping ambrosia with the angels

'til forever is done

Author's Note

"In any weather, at any hour of the day or night, I have been anxious to improve the nick of time, and notch it on my stick too; to stand on the meeting of two eternities, the past and future, which is precisely the present moment; to toe that line." - Thoreau

Reviews

[emmajoy]

This poem undulates lyrical and visual.. is gently done, not 'in your face' but pauses thought to stop a little and see, feel, what you have. Just realised, the word is 'subtle' - an invitation to see the scenes with pleasure.. to pause, close eyes then. join the pigeons in a little paddling.. Enjoyed this so much. Thank you!.

[Pete]

oops - forgot to comment on this special review. my refuge where everything is real including my feelings. thanks for "getting it" em ... :)

[SheIsMe]

Beautiful...just beautiful. I loved the alliteration and imagery, the ebb and flow...phenomenal write Pete.

[Pete]

so kind. appreciated dear friend ... :)

[Poetic Beauty]

Love the line United in truth as one. Coming together and uniting making a better way is a powerful and beautiful thought. It is amazing what we can accomplish when we decided to stop the hate and stop fight.

Love all the descriptions in this poem. The last two stanzas caught my attention and made me think on a bit of a deeper level. Well done and creative

[Pete]

thanks pb. anything is possible. let it begin with us ... :)

[Chris Shaw]

I was captivated. I found the park and the puddles where the birds drink from yesterday's rain. Truly atmospheric. Really enjoyed Pete. I got drawn in completely by the imagery. Well done.

Chris

[Pete]

you mention the line that this entire poem was built around. was down at the park recently after a rain and some birds came and drank from a puddle near the bench where i sit and it got me thinking about a lot of things. 'course i always take a song along with me. there is an 'atmosphere' (as you call it) at the park that draws me and speaks to the soul if we dare listen. thank you for appreciating it chris ... :)

[Chris Shaw]

Pleased I found the line which was the main focus Pete. Really stood out. Nice work :)

[Carlos Lorenzo Estrada]

till forever is done, indeed. Amazing poem, Pete. This dance with words and painted images made me feel as if I were within someone's dream. And made me wish the dream could have been mine. Thank you for sharing this poem.

[Pete]

welcome to my dream carlos. thanks for sharing and "getting it" ... :)

[Markie]

I am overwhelmed by your skillful play with words. I must confess that, no adamant heart would fail to read and appreciate this piece.

Keep it up.

[Pete]

so kind. thank you for sharing encouraging thoughts markie ... :)