The Sickness

The Sickness

A Poem by Nic
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Inspired by a family member's death

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The people with the sickness
Walk around. Mind-less.
 
I try to convince the healthy to leave,
But they are too stubborn to believe.
 
I watch as it kills people like an infection,
Destroying town, section by section.
 
I tried to get somebody,
But they we’re busy counting money.
 
I try to get injected,
So I don’t get infected.
 
But no shot would do,
You’ll need your mind to make it through.
 
The black smoke,
Works its way to the young folk.
 
The only protection,
Is isolation.

© 2008 Nic


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i agree -

The only protection,
Is isolation.

nice poem

Regards,
Poetic Soul

Posted 11 Years Ago


Ok just step away from the resident evil... go on... it's all right.

well written, adequately spaced, and your punstuation places proper emphasis in the proper places.

Posted 12 Years Ago


I like this alot reminds me of 28 days later with all the disease and death, or like the book series left behind because they don't repent when they should...

Lovelyy.

Posted 12 Years Ago


awesome form and metaphors

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

INTERESTING KINDA SOUNDS LIKE DAWN OF THE DEAD. I LIKE THE CONCEPT. THE DISEASE SPREADING AND NO ONE EVEN CARING OR BELIEVING. GOOD JOB...NIGHTWISH

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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Bri
How true, how true. An excellent poem, and I loved the rhyme scheme and spacing. See, I review things. Now you go review mine!

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I loved it!
It's got really good rhyme
and rhythm
And I give it
2
thumbs
Up.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Awww! I like it! ^^ I think it's pretty good! ^^

Posted 12 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Nice poem; excellent rhyming and rhythm, and a very good way of getting the message through to readers.
Great work.

Posted 12 Years Ago


4 of 4 people found this review constructive.

I believe I believe.
I'm not usually a fan of verse, but I really like what you did here and I agree with the message.
Good write

Posted 12 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.


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Nic
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Cincinnati, OH



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