Transitions

in collaboration with Nisreen

"Transition"

Mammals wailed in disbelief

whose voices echoe in the deep

The Blues in saxophone relief

twenty tons of krill eating teeth 

A miracle was birthed 

In full bravery

A figure of man 

Brought peace to the land

from the soup of primordial mix

hides in plain sight, octopus tricks

spills ink jets when spotted

unwinding his reach previously knotted

Unhiding a double face

One face appeared

mirrored

With all its ugliness

Tolerating peace 

negotiations repleat

Creating so much noise

simply vocal 

Confusing the masses in news

it was essential ...

built to destroy

writings of justice 

burning the toll

Liars in wicked teeth of brown

Dying in the dawn

Melting in snow

ignorant

transition expedient

relative ingredient

matters not

which face one wears.

E. with Nisreen

Author's Note

Reviews

[.]

-- for me (someone whose first language is not english), this poem describes the anatomy of evolution... and the concluding lines reveal that despite all the commotion caused by people who make a lot of noise or lie, human beings continue to evolve... because those who create a cacophony are not the architects of evolution... they're merely "ingredients"... and their importance is not substantial in the larger scheme of things... it's "relative" to other ingredients... -- -- mammals still turn into human beings and human beings get better with time despite the presence of noisy rotten apples...

-- from this perspective, the poem does a fantastic job of describing the intricate details of the process of evolution... -- the collab is flawless... (one cannot tell who wrote which lines)... so well done both of you... -- the two of you are 'thinking' people... and there aren't too many around so thank you for writing this intensely thought-provoking symphony...

[Einstein Noodle]

oh my goodness serah!!!! your review captures my breath .. well read ...so intuitive and precise .. seems the honor to be ours for your reading .. no kidding!!! can't wait till Nisreen reads this .. thank you to the max!
E.

[.]

-- my privilege, E... -- i love pieces that delve into the depths of the human condition... and once again... you and Nisreen did a fab job... -- very seamless collab... :)

[Einstein Noodle]

thank you so much!

[.]

-- you're very welcome, sweet one :)

[Lydia Shutter]

You're welcome E. happy V day!

[Delmar Cooper]

Heads or tails it is still a quarter, still worth 25 pennies unless it's a phony.

[Einstein Noodle]

:) .... yes indeed! ever so much to be phony for eh!? ;)) love ya Delmar! thank you for visiting to read and review ...
E.

[Rita L. Sev]

Creation, destruction, the noise and the calm... it's all here in a word-swirl that takes the reader into the eye of the storm, from which we emerge anew... A great collaboration!

[Einstein Noodle]

Thanks again Rita ..for your visits and for reviewing ..Nisreen is too cool! love your take on this ... definitely a bit of a swirl ;)
E.

[Dara]

I have had the pleasure of reading this poem many times to have it sink it. The images are astounding and the message rings clear. This is a wonderful collaboration between two very gifted poets. It really makes one think.

[Einstein Noodle]

one could not ask for more ..so glad you took time to re-read ..it is the case with me (and i venture most readers) from time to time ..to have to go back and read over ...the mind set can make a big difference ...sometimes it shuts me completely out of a poems meanings ..until i sleep on it and re-read ..thank you again Dara for your valuable time :))
E.

[Dara]

It was such a pleasure. This poem is deep and deserves all the attention it gets. It is very profound.

[Einstein Noodle]

thank you again Dara!

[Chris]

With heavens like that - earth would be such an underwhelming place to view...

I always love viewing where collabs go...

[Einstein Noodle]

i had the best time doing this with Nisreen ... thanks for your take on it ..your visits are always appreciated Chris!
E.

[Chris]

Both of you guys are treasured.

[Einstein Noodle]

thanks Chris ..back at ya and Merry Christmas!

[Pryde Foltz]

In the dark the beast does not understand the length of his reach. An ethereal and dark write. Well done, you two:)

[Einstein Noodle]

love your take on this .. your study of the Tao sheds light on enemies and friends ... and if i understand correctly .. neither are actually desirable ;))) ... such a treat to work with Nisreen on this ... thanks again Pryde ... love your "stuff"
E.

[Pryde Foltz]

Friends are unavoidable:)

[Einstein Noodle]

ahahaha! Happy New Year!! my friend! :)))))

[Pryde Foltz]

Happy New Year:)

[Calamityofgin]

mirrored

With all its ugliness
Tolerating peace
negotiations repleat

(my favorites were the lines in beteeen..the lines not quite as structured..the one words..ignorant..those..confusing the masses in the news..it was essential..those made this for me..)

Creating so much noise...!! These

simply vocal. Yes...

Einstein..lol nothing about this was boring! I loved it..doesnt have to be a f**k fest for me to love something lol
This was primordial sea...the blues in saxaphone relief..20 tons of krill eating teeth..hearing whale sounds..seeing strange one eyed shiny things in the dark deep turn...
You know we have these Van Allen belts around the Earth..that if you record them..their noise frequency matches that of whales as if our planet were speaking the language of our ocean creatures to other planets and close travellers saying.."life here, there is water!"
Loved this!
Thanks you noodle head! Lol
Nisreen was a part? Hmm. Didnt seem like her stuff..but kudos kid.

Much love
Calamity of jennifer

[Einstein Noodle]

thank you so much for your sensitive and thorough read and review ..very grateful Calamity ... so glad there were parts and pieces and the in betweens that tweeked you ;) Nireen is very much in this ... i think influencing each other was mutual ... she is suvch a free and inspiring poetess ..
E.

[Valentine]

And we all came into being. I was lost a bit on this one, had to read it over. Valentine

[Einstein Noodle]

its one readers have to kind of let go logic and reason i think (Nisreens signature;) and go for the feel and where it takes each person ..really appreciate you taking time Valentine to re-read .. sometimes we glean things not seen before ..sometimes i have to return to poems another day because of getting stuck on a thought upon a first time reading ...
E.

[B]

waw
we did good :)
i am so happy we wrote together

[Einstein Noodle]

:) ........................

[andrew mitchell]

Well done guys and gals how man destroys everything around him for his success. This Japanese whale research gets up my nose too, research my foot!

[B]

lol
thanks :)

[Einstein Noodle]

thanks for reading andrew! we sure have that tendency to destroy .. and the capacity to hope ...seems so dark at times ..especially today's news and politicing
E.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

this just is too timely and for me has to register as that persona with several different faces who keeps getting deleted from the site, but creates one new face after another...the evolution is only in face, not in content of reviews....very sad.

the monster's teeth appear again and again.

i was similar to another reviewer...i saw so much nisreen in this...the style pointed in her direction...so the collaboration sounds like one, and is quite smooth.

j.

[B]

thank you J :)

[Einstein Noodle]

thanks jacob! yes ..very Nisreen throughout ... yes ..that ugly persona is vile and at it again .. hopefully he will get bored not get the attention he craves ... block and report says i!
E.