A Poem by r

to all the people who saw me everyday and never did a damn thing to stop me


These silent haunting screams

will never be heard

you sit in oblivion

and utter not a word


these hands I feel upon me

are so life-like & real

you sit in oblivion

with a face made of steel


this razor to my wrist

it's just so damn good

you sit in oblivion

claiming you did all you could


this full glass in my hand

the liquid burns all down my throat

you sit in oblivion

making me a scapegoat


the cancer between my fingers

going to my lungs

you sit in oblivion

saying there's nothing to be done


the bruises on my body

so easy to see

you sit in oblivion

making life what you want it to be


the noose around my neck

is getting tighter everyday

you sit in oblivion

with nothing else to say


my body in a coffin

planning a funeral date

you say "I sat in oblivion

and now it's too late"


if only you could see

these rivers running red

if you weren't in oblivion you'd know

I'm already dead

© 2011 r

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This is a masterpiece-seriously, this is just absolutely beautiful and enchanting in its' every single, sorrow-full and destructive way! What you wrote about and the way you wrote this is absolutely magnificent-I'm sure many can relate to this poem, and I really feel that I can. I love the word choice, too-'oblivion', what a fantastic word! I'm in awe... This is going to my favourites; thank you for sharing this!

Posted 12 Years Ago

2 of 2 people found this review constructive.


Wow, I find this very emotional from personal experiences of mine. I can feel the rawness creeping. Plus, I really like the repeatition.
Nice work.

Posted 11 Years Ago

Wow this was an incredible write.
"if only you could see
these rivers running red
if you weren't in oblivion you'd know
I'm already dead"

I loved those lines the most. Especially the river running red bit. Cleverly made. :)

Posted 11 Years Ago

Breath taking.

Posted 11 Years Ago

This really spoke to me, "wow" is all I can say. Fantastic piece of writing.

Posted 11 Years Ago

Wow, nice work.

Posted 11 Years Ago

This is raw and deep. Your flow is good and your imagery is vivid. Great ink here!

Posted 11 Years Ago

Dreary, haunting... I think you probably could have done without a few of the verses, making the overall effect of the poem a bit more sharp and sudden... but all in all, a fantastic write!

Posted 11 Years Ago

Brilliantly written!! deep with emotion!! the world is so wrapped up in its self to care for another, this portrays the here and now beautifully. and so sadly!

blessed be

Posted 11 Years Ago

very good i enjoy it

Posted 12 Years Ago

We are, none of us, dead. Not yet. I know that pain, I know what drove the pen that wrote this. Pain makes us live, even though it seems to be the opposite.

N. Strong

Posted 12 Years Ago

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Added on February 21, 2011
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