You and I

its a letter n i m in love with the moment :)...

You and I

 

In the moving clouds, I see a picture of you and me,

Pictures of the stories, stories of our love that I always live,

In some you are running after me, trying to grab me on a wet seashore,

In others, you are playing with my hair,

Blowing kisses on me, like I am something you always wanna hold.

 

I know it all sounds weird,

But you are just like that dream that I always see,

Sometimes I make a house for us in the sand,

Making a space where there is no one but us,

I paint our pictures,

Coloring them with the moments of our love,

When you go out, I wait on the door,

I know I look stupid, but that’s the only way I can look at you for long.

 

Your presence is something I always feel,

Sometimes in my own shadow,

Sometimes in that tiny soul, that’s breathing inside me,

In the mirror, I always see you standing around me,

Taking my breath away with your slow kisses,

Every time you touch my shoulder,

You make me feel like a woman who has lost her all in love,

At the end of the day when you come back to me, I see my sunrise again,

I know the world waits for its moon,

But I, I only wait for you, the one I love.

 

Slowly, slowly we both will get old,

There will be wrinkles on my face, so on yours,

With those old feet, our walks in the sand will be slow, people will laugh,

But even in that age, I know your eyes will still make me feel beautiful like all,

Old skins can’t feel the touch; I will still hold your cold hands to feel your warmth,

In the nights when stars will sleep, I know you will still sing me our song,

Our song, lyrics of which, only our hearts know.

 

Then one day when I will leave this world, I hope you will still live for me,

Live for our moments, live for these clouds,

Don’t worry I will surely come back, to say you hi, but only when I feel like it,

I know you will get angry on me, but even after my death I will still be your life,

Through the rains, I will make love to you,

I know it will be too much for you; after all, you will be old,

But I am in love with you, and seeing you wet will only make me feel I am all yours.

 

All this, all this is just a story,

Sometimes I am able to say it; sometimes I have to keep it with me,

I love you a lot, but you are far away, so just take it as a letter,

A letter shared between your heart and me,

A letter which I know will never get its reply,

Even if you are busy; someday do sit with me for some time,

I will read this letter, and will open my heart,

To tell you what all I have, and how much love I have, how much love I have.

 

Raj

Reviews

[S.F]

What a spell-binding poem. Beautiful. You have a special talent in paining a whole story with the simplest of words and the shortest of verses. You paint them with such skill and clarity, there is barely any detail that I fail to see. Great job, my friend.

[raj24]

Thanks Salma for the beautiful review...simplest words..actually i dont know many words..so i just try to play them in best way...all i want to ensure is my readers get the right idea..n i m glad u liked it..thanks for the reading..:)

Raj

[Gurleen Saluja]

a so very mesmerizing piece.. beautifully decorated with metaphors..creates a great imagery.. thank you for sharing such a wonderful write :)

[raj24]

i am glad you liked it Gurleen..thanks for reading it and giving such a lovely review..:)

read morei am glad you liked it Gurleen..thanks for reading it and giving such a lovely review..:)

Raj

[Gurleen Saluja]

so very welcome sir :)

[Wall Hermitt]

A remarkably drafted letter existing in the shape of a poetic structure. There is romance booming within this piece, with beautifully written phrases that capture the heart doing it wonders. I particularly adore the individual stanza endings. “I know the world waits for its moon, But I, I only wait for you, the one I love”. Truly stimulating and heartfelt. There is evident proficiency in your poetic expression that gets the reader very engrossed.

As always, thanks for the share!

W.H.

[raj24]

you are wonderful Hermitt..with your reviews i feel my words are alive and they can speak and tell their own stories to you....i m grateful to you for such wonderful review..thanks for reading..

Raj

[Wall Hermitt]

Thanks! And you're welcome!

[uNmAsKeD-dEluSiOns]

This was so neat, it tells such a great story and sounds very professional, very well written! I like how you stretched out the story and gave the emotion away bit by bit until it turned into altogether a great piece. Well done

[raj24]

Thanks buddy..thanks for liking it and giving such a wonderful review..thanks for the read :)

Raj

[anne]

this was so well written letter.....but I loved the paragraph when you both will be old.....good job....

[raj24]

thats my favorite too...i liked that bonding even at that last time of life..love holds a special place in our heart..:) i am glad you liked the story..:) i don't have many words to explain my stories so with simplest of things i am working..:)

Raj

[anne]

go ahead with it.... :)

[Sophy Freebirds]

Kudos to you.. :) i have shunned this feeling but by reading love poems i can't stop smiling.you presented this letter well.I have gone through this feeling of sadness and your words spoke to me.Love the way it comes alive.

~Sophy

[raj24]

your words made me smile.. i am glad you liked it..your words really means a lot..thanks for reading..:)

Raj

[Sophy Freebirds]

Was a pleasure on my part Raj.. :)

[Sophy Freebirds]

Was a pleasure on my part Raj.. :)

[Norah]

simply beautiful... full of sensations. Bravo!

[raj24]

i am glad Norah you liked it...I always wait for your words..thanks for reading it..:)

Raj

[Norah]

It is always a pleasure to read your amazing writings, a true genius. :)

[Sami Khalil]

"I love you a lot, but you are far away, so just take it as a letter,
A letter shared between your heart and me,
A letter which I know will never get its reply,
Even if you are busy; someday do sit with me for some time,
I will read this letter, and will open my heart,"

A sweet and lovely poem. Some sadness is visible too. Bravo...............

[raj24]

Thanks Sami for reading it...i am glad u liked it...thanks..

Raj

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)...................

[jacob erin-cilberto]

another really interesting write, and from the female perspective...

this is like a letter never sent...just written...she wants to share it but can't.

[raj24]

thanks Jacob...thanks for reading it..:)
Raj

[Ashira Macy]

What a beautiful story of love with a very scenic imagery. I love that you follow these lovers into old age, only to find out it is a love letter.

Sometimes I make a house for us in the sand,
Making a space where there is no one but us,
I paint our pictures,
Coloring them with the moments of our love,

These were definitely my favorite lines. Adoration just pours off of them.

[raj24]

i thought of making it a letter only in the end...sometimes we draw many pictures in our mind, we share beautiful moments, we make beautiful plans only to find they are just our thoughts..n person whom we want to say all this is busy with his work..so its just that ..love letter to say whats all in heart..thanks for reading..:)

Raj

[DIVYA]

With this writing, you take the reader on an entire journey of a lifetime and even beyond it. True love does not perish but lives on through every element of nature. A very touching and heartfelt narrative. Much appreciated.

[raj24]

Thanks Divya...loves surely lives on...n the nature itself is the source of love...we cant ignore it..thanks for reading..:)

Raj