Desire

.. if....

DESIRE

she lies facing down,

shy of his eyes warm devotion,

hoping for a lover's touch,

the release of her too long

hidden passions

and her powers as a human being!

~~redzone ~~

Author's Note

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Reviews

[kublakhan27]

There is no greater or sweeter moment to be human...you've said just enough here my friend...you ignite the imagination, then leave the reader to have at it...I love the element of shyness here, and that smouldering need to be freed of it...this is desire at its best...nicely done my friend :)

[Lyn Anderson]

Again, my friend, did you read my stuff on the mature tag? Nice work, but should be "she lies face down" unless you like it the way it is, poetic license and all that.

[redzone]

I think KL, I have an aversion to the lays/lies thing... whenever I type lies, I think of deciet and the BS often said with a straight face and words... I know it's not correct, but I think I will invoke "poetic licence" .. I have read these poems and I think I will make a stand around censor police... if I get chased then I will do so with my artistic head held high... but i will fight it... I will also use mature tag if I think a poem is not suitable to be read by someone under 13... as I have already done on some of my poems... but this poem is suitable for all ages... my goodness which word is too much?? desire??? passion?? it must be lover's touch.. yep now that is way too mature for kids... (this is not directed to you KL but for any prying eyes that would be "offended"... HA!!

I do appreciate your concerns KL I really do... it's the mark of a good friend and someone who cares.. thanks..

[redzone]

thats deceit

[Lyn Anderson]

Okay, I just know how crappy I felt when I had my ability to rate my own poems yanked from me. I hope it doesn't happen, but I just thought you should know.

[redzone]

if you want, you can just say, "that redzone is soooo stubborn"... lol but it would also be true, at least to some extent... there is a saying I try to live by, having principles doesn't mean anything if you don't fight for them... I honestly appreciate that you let me know and reminded me some more KL and also for the lays/lies difficulties I have... I did change this word in the poem I just posted "Shadow Land".. HA.. ;0)

[Cryingkate]

Wow Red those few lines speak much of powerful stuff.

Sorry I haven't got back with you I just don't do very well at keeping up do I?
but I do ?
I hope you know it's not that I don't want to.

Hugs and awesome powerful write here

[redzone]

no worries Kate... You do just fine... I am happy that you not only read, but enjoyed this write... always welcome to wander around anytime you can...

[Cryingkate]

Your very kind and understanding Red. I'm still doing lots of canning but am enjoying touching bases with you all again. I have been reading some of your writes and haven't got around to letting you know it yet.
Do you notice? I have. That everyone is growing in their poetry and stories.... I see a huge growth going on. I think there must be a good connection with us all :-)