I Was Told

I Was Told

Well, I was told,
but who listens
when a heart is on fire.
I was warned
but you turned me to ash,
and I burnt so passionately
in your arms.
There’s a fiery madness here
found in your silent words
and I was warned
your touch would freeze
my heart in frost bitten sanity.
But it doesn’t matter
as this madness swallowed me whole
and I need to know
are you real;
do you care?
Or am I
just the ash falling
from your fingertips,
like a smoking cigarette
still burning in madness.

Aztec Warrior/redzone  12.8.16

Author's Note

... thanks for reading...

Reviews

[D Connolly]

"I was told, but who listens when a heart is on fire" That sums it up... makes me think of a friend who is so desperate for love she looks for it with all the wrong people, and when she is warned, she doesn't listen, and then when she gets burned, we're there to sweep up the ashes. But one of the beautiful thing about her, and others like her with big hearts who are in love with love is, they rise from those ashes like a phoenix. Such truth is put into this poem. I wish that there was a more hopeful ending though. The smoking ash of a burned lover is never the end :)

[redzone]

when you are young, there never seems to be and end to love of being in love or in finding love.... but well smoking ash and a burned lover often means the end when older.... the search may continue, but the actuality is something else...

Dani, thanks I loved your review and would also add, never crash and burn, keep on finding love...

[D Connolly]

Sending big hugs :)

[barleygirl]

You've done a great job of showing instead of telling the way that "love can be blind" . . . but not falling back on clichés to make your point. Love the hot & cold contrasts, especially the final statement about cigarette ash falling carelessly . . . such a telling analogy. I never try to make any critique about someone's love choices becuz (as you've so aptly described here) people just don't want to hear it when they're in the throes of the thing! *sigh!* Just leave me alone & let me crash & burn!

[redzone]

hey Margie, sorry it's taken so long to say thank you for your review.... I think what makes it so "blinding" is that "I need to love" line in the song embedded... and eventually we find we either crash and burn or find someone that just fits and enriches... I love your review Margie...

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

Your poetry asks all the right questions!

[redzone]

thanks Queenie, but then there are the answers... ash often still burns... oh well... glad you stopped by and thanks for your comment...

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

I believe great spirits live on forever and so does their love and passion.....smokin'....😀Happy Thursday!

[redzone]

Happy Thursday back to you Queenie...

[Ana Papaya]

That is awesome, and she sounds dangerous. Some women are so alluring, like magic I guess. They weave a spell around men. Then they're gone.
Great song too.

[redzone]

yeah, love this song Ana... and especially the line "I need to love" ... or is this just madness to want, to need to love...

and then there is the madness of loving your visits to my poems.. ;0) definitely "magic" Ana, thank you deeply...

[Ana Papaya]

You're welcome!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and then she takes one more puff, and stamps out the cigarette...or the heart...

j.

[redzone]

or Jacob puts the cigarette out on your heart.... and it hurts Jacob, it hurts...

thanks for your visit and comment

[wordman]

redzone,i just could`nt imagine any woman doing this to you ! a great write,loved the music

[redzone]

thanks for your reading and for thinking that... appreciated greatly

[Lydia Shutter]

What a great visual...."like a smoking cigarette still burning in madness" When a heart is on fire, all that matters is THAT second, that kiss, that touch, that embrace, that seduction. There is no madness and no sanity either. There just is, is, well, THAT second. We have all been there....if we are lucky. Not sure if the song inspired the poem, but surely it is the perfect complement to your words. Oh so "nice". Lydi**

[redzone]

ahh Lydi you are too kind... in this case I found the song after writing the poem, looking up "madness" in a youtube search... and yes, it fit exactly right...

so glad you liked and thanks again for that "nice" review...