Let it be revealed

Confined in thick wall
I on toil grace fall
Those smiles full of ways
Put me out of maze
And I can’t erase


Warm naive laughter,
What are you after?
Bliss I won’t conceal
If it’s done at will,
Truth I want to feel


I let words subside
But I got tongue tied
To mention the name
I wish we’re the same
Now that I’ll proclaim


I plead waste not strength
Rather joy at length
Gloomy cloud insight
Will change to clear white,
When words are cast tight


And what I’ve written
Stand still to give in
To be the right man
And do make a plan
To show what I can


Let it be revealed
What many times sealed,
I’ll ask if it’s fine,
To share heart with mine?
Hope you’ll let it,shine

Reviews

[Belle]

It takes patience and skill to work with rhyme and with rhythm, but for you it seems you you did it in this piece naturally. The diction of the poem is like a cascading water. I believe it is because of the full rhyming that you have followed. Also, I counted the syllable per line from the first line to the the last, you were consistent: 5 syllable per line. Highly artistic you are.

[sedatezoe]

thanks mam belle for doing the math!haha.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Nice poem.

Keep on going. Hope to read more of your writings.