Cero Amigos

Cero Amigos

A Poem by revalatia
"

-with friends like these... who needs enemas....

"
To those claiming to be friends
-including those who just pretend-
To whom concern is just a trend:
Is an ear too much for you to lend?
Time too valuable for you to spend?
.....And once I'm useful, you'll ascend,
.....and still my kindness I'll extend.
Even as your words offend_
_and whilst my thoughts begin to blend,
Is it you I can depend?
To help my mind begin to mend..
or is that where your friendship ends?
I simply wish to make amends,
before we cross this bridge again.

© 2016 revalatia


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Love it. Love that it rhymes. I ask those questions myself mainly because I have no friends.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Encore! Bravo! (Trumpets blaring) you rhyme is on point, your content is good, your vocabulary well chosen, my advice? I haven't scanned it but just Incase try adding metrical structure it would really enhance it.. and before you know it, it would take off like a song (which I always believed to be poetry's highest form) 100pnts!

Posted 7 Years Ago



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Added on August 13, 2016
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revalatia
revalatia

Azusa, CA



About
Thoughts in motion..words spiraling inside me.. more to come.................................later....In the meantime.. My own moment of clarity.. was realizing repeating the same mistakes over and ov.. more..

Writing
Beeware.. Beeware..

A Poem by revalatia