Prolouge

Prolouge

A Chapter by Zeyh
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Prolouge of Twisted Roses.

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Pink cherry petals floated down around them. Wind whipped their hair--his crimson shock and her ebony locks--flying around their snow white faces. Bliss played across his beautiful face, his body relaxed; hers grew tense with anticipation. Her lavander eyes bored into his soft gold ones.

 

"Goodbye, baby," he mouthed at her, his being turning into the same petals that surrounded them. Her eyes stung with tears and her shoulders shook.

 

Was he happy now? Now that he left her alone to fend for herself without him? Pain filler her slender body, taking over everything she was: her bones, her blood, her soul. For half a moment, her unmoving heart beat, screaming in it's own way.

 

"Why?" she whispered, her voice soft as down feathers. "Why did you leave?"

 

With that she turned to the empty, candel lit street and ran away, her feet kicking up dirt in clouds behind her. 



© 2008 Zeyh


Author's Note

Zeyh
I know this is short and some things may not be clear--sorry, this is only the prolouge.

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Wow - I love all the vivid imagery in this! All your adjectives are amazing and fit seemlessly together :D. I especially like this line: "Bliss played across his beautiful face." So pretty! And what a sad tale - an intriguing way to start. Looking forward to more! (though I don't like swearing so much, and from your message there's more further on...) You're very talented!

Posted 16 Years Ago


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Posted 16 Years Ago


Lots of potential i see with in this beginning of something great!
The only thing i could see, was "Candel" is supposed to be "Candle"
Other then that, great start.. I look forward to the first chapter.

Posted 16 Years Ago


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Ooooo sounds good would love to hear more! Though I think 'filler' is supposed to be 'filled', but we all make mistakes, and only one is great.

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Zeyh
Zeyh

Japan



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I started my writing career about a year ago (last... June, I think) with fanfiction. My original was A Harry Potter fanfiction, which I have now discarded. Do not ask to see it, or I might have to hi.. more..

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