Love Sonnet 130

The sun has settled now below the waves, 

To dim the land as shades of dusk are drawn, 

My muse upon the daylight's spell still raves, 

And craves the thrills that  have, by now, been gone; 

So were your smiles which  sprightly beamed  awhile, 

And  vanished like the day engulfed by night, 

And to this loss my heart would often rile, 

If not for hope that  things  would soon turn right; 

But days are spent like leaves that fall from trees, 

Or waters of the rivers or swift streams, 

Or else, as passing fancy, fleeting, flees, 

Like episodes of unremembered dreams; 

…….Yet  days will come again, need not be mourned, 

…….Each breaking dawn will be with thrills adorned.

Reviews

[Shane Mohamed]

I had to read this more than once; that's how deep the message was. Indeed, our lives are nothing but repetitive cycles, and the only thing that keeps us alive is the hope of waking for the next, better, day. My favorite lines were:
"But days are spent like leaves that fall from trees,
Or waters of the rivers or swift streams,"
They sum up the message of your poem. I get the sense that you're free, and not afraid or bound by the rules of punctuation or linguistics. You simply write. I have a lot to learn from you. I think you've read more Shakespeare than I have. You took this to another level. A+

[Reyvrex Questor Reyes]

Shane, I sense that you are such an earnest poet bent to strive to perfection, or at least to be at par with worthy poets. Yes, reading more Shakespeares could give you the feel of his poetry. Though I admit after having practised writing on some 300 sonnets, I am still unsatisfied with my ability. I am always learning as before. Soon, you will gain the subtlety of expression that is the beauty of poetry as I sense it in your work. Keep on, brother.

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the feel of old tale and story.
"Yet days will come again, need not be mourned,
…….Each breaking dawn will be with thrills adorned."
The old way of speaking want and need left us with true feelings of the moment. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Reyvrex Questor Reyes]

Thank you for appreciating. That encourages me no end.

[Coyote Poetry]

I found you on Facebook. Please send me read request here. I roam to three sites.I like your poetry. I'm reading the classics now. I just finished Virgil and I'm reading Lurietius now. We need to read the old and new writers and Poets. Only way we can improve. Good to meet you.

[Reyvrex Questor Reyes]

It is very heartening to find poets like you John, still looking towards the Classics. Although it takes some effort to write the old way, it could be rewarding enough. Thanks for asking.

[Augustus]

This is a very well-written Shakespearean sonnet. The poem is very true to its form, which is very important here. The romanticism is clothed in the lofty elegant language befitting the dignified love story portrayed. My favorite line was "Like episodes of unremembered dreams". I think the flow of the poem was lovely as well. Very swift and smooth. Some of the syllables have the wrong stress, but I think that's a fairly minor point give the overall impact of the poem. Well done!

[Reyvrex Questor Reyes]

Thanks Augustus for the review. The way it goes, it becomes apparent that it comes from someone in the know regards sonnets. The stresses of some of my syllables falter in its conformity to the iambic metrical measure. These are mostly true in three-syllabled words where the stress did not happen to alternate. Thanks for the encouraging assessment despite the flaws. I'm still learning.

[Augustus]

You are most welcome Reyvrex. I have faced similar difficulties regarding syllable stress while writing sonnets too! It is quite challenging to get it 100% right. I'm learning as well! :)

[Reyvrex Questor Reyes]

I am glad to come across someone of some adroitness in poetry. You very well speak the language that many have only some glimmer of understanding. Write on. We need brilliant stars amidst the haze.

[Augustus]

You honour me beyond my stature. I thank you for your kindness. It is a pleasure to interact with fellow students of verse. :)

[Reyvrex Questor Reyes]

Yes, I am that. Travelers, or students along the same route reinforce each other to lessen the hardships along the way. Regards.

[DeeZire]

This sonnet reads like flowing wine....and very beautiful with every line.

[Reyvrex Questor Reyes]

Thanks Deezire. Your comment is like music to the ears.