Scars

It's a short poem. won't take much time to review. lol :P

Don't laugh upon my marks

Or make fun of my tears

Don't trample my dreams

Don't awaken my fears

 

I am stronger than what you think

Though tears are in my eyes

If I get up to fight

It won't be a very nice surprise

 

Because just like the age of the sky

Is written somewhere in the stars

The measure of my strength

Is etched in my deep scars

 

Author's Note

I know this is short, but tell me how it is please!

Reviews

[Amelia]

I love this so much

[Aehr]

thanks! :)

[Coyote Poetry]

A very good poem. Scars should be warnings for the wise. Scars mean we were not afraid and we took on life. Good description led to a very nice ending. Thank you for sharing the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Reeti]

A bit of Oliver Twist there. The narrator is not hedonistic but can stand up for himself/herself- a persevering warrior who relishes on his/her own degree of strength (that i admire very much).The symbolic expressions made in the final stanza is mystifying and rich in its meaning.

[PurpleQuartz]

Simply perfect!

[Lina Grey]

Love the last stanza darling. Beautiful little write :)

[Aehr]

oh, the last stanza is pretty much the reason for writing the whole poem :)
Thank you! :D

[Lina Grey]

My pleasure :)

[Erinne S.]

I really liked it. You definitely shouldn't be afraid to be who you are and people shouldn't bring you down because of it! Very nice job!

["Fanatical Dreamer"]

Very nicely written.Keep at it good job!

[eglantine]

While I adore the word "upon" it does not fit with the rest of the diction in this poem... perhaps just "Don't laugh at my marks"

I can relate to the finding of inner-strength in this poem for I too have scars. Thanks for sharing.

[Pritesh]

Fabulous composition.Fun to read and extremely fluid.No can actually assess the strength just by physical exposure, consequently suffers the brunt of surprise! I liked your last lines.Poem starting to end holds the attraction.AND HEY....short poems should'nt be appologized for....as I largely believe in them.keep writing

[Aehr]

hehe. thanks :)