I'm Alright

Hello old pal, it’s been so long since we last met

And I would like to take this moment to tell you a little secret

You see, I’m not really violent, but something happened last night

My heart and mind were at war, and nothing seemed to be right

I was torn into two, and I didn’t know what was to come

So I walked around the house, and I searched for my bottle of rum

My mind was calculating, telling me things I never knew

And my heart was in its own steady pace, telling me things too

All I could do, was listen in silence, and wait for a conclusion to rise

A conclusion to tell me which of my two choices was wise

But then, it had to end of course, oh what a terrible fight!

It’s just my heart that’s broken, other than that, I’m alright 

Author's Note

I wrote this one from the point of view of a drunk woman telling her old peer about a choice she had to make the night before, and how her heart and mind were at war. This one is after another long, dry spell :)

Reviews

[Thea]

Oh, God, yes. This one struck me. The last line, "It’s just my heart that’s broken, other than that, I’m alright". Got me emotional at the moment. I loved it.

[stars are far]

welll.. thats nice.. wise ..intresting
i like this piece ..so far your best for me ;)

[TL Boehm]

It’s just my heart that’s broken, other than that, I’m alright

Yes, that line is powerful. Life is crashing down around me but its all good. We live like that at times.
Well penned.

[Aehr]

thank you :)

[Hester Vane]

I really like this! Great style and structure, a unique piece! Good job

[KAin]

Really enjoyed this one!
Especially like the final line. Battered pride, but pride, nonetheless - it conveys a strength of spirit that just makes the preceding lines resonate with it all the more.
You've done great work here, keep it up.

[Aehr]

thank you Landred :)

[Rita L. Sev]

I like your approach here - a good perspective piece. The end line really hits it home - that touch of attitude, she still has her pride but she's so torn up... Well done!

[Another Poet]

Oooh I loveeeee it, it was a nice poem. I like the flow and the end of the poem.

[Rhea752]

Wow. This was very nice. I get the feeling of mind vs. heart. I hate those kinds of battles. Very nicely done!! Keep writing Rhea!! :D

[Aehr]

thanks! :)

[Coyote Poetry]

I know the feeling of this poem. Fighting with emotion and booze. We lose. Good description made some wild visions and I like the ending. If we are lucky. No-one get hurt we lose our mind. Direct and honest words in the outstanding poem.
Coyote