Cold Eyes

In the warmth of the sun

there is a shiver in the air

your eyes, the color of old man winter

won't allow the frigid cold to heal

Reviews

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

I like the juxtaposition of the seasons...the summer sunlight and the eyes that are locked in a state of winter. Sad eyes, windows to the very spirit itself, are possibly the most intensely mournful things in the world. This was well put; simple and concise, but well done in that you did not try to overplay the idea. Well done.

[rhythm&blues]

Very grateful for this review, coming from such an extraordinary writer as yourself, thank you.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

no matter what the actions....the eyes tell the truth...

and they say a lot about how much warmth a person possess, or not.

abstract piece that says so much in so few words...less is more.

really like this.

jacob

[Kristin Lee]

Awesome! I love the frigid feel of this poem and how the stark contrast of sun and cold meet eachother through a pair of eyes. Because it is true, looks can kill...or in this case freeze time. Beautiful!

[Baby Ricochet]

Nice and to the point. Good one

[quinfinn]

it has been postulated that the eyes are the windows to the soul. when we see someone with cold, distant and hateful eyes it makes us feel uncomfortable and cold....this is a terrific poem, short but speaks volumes in its message. well done!

[Angi]

The eyes speak volumes. I can feel the icy contempt in just 4 lines. Well done!

[rhythm&blues]

Thank you so much!

[Sami Khalil]

I love this write...:)

[rhythm&blues]

So pleased you do. :) Thank you.

[Sami Khalil]

I did. You are welcome...:)

[icelandicblue]

Oooh this was positively chilling. What an excellent poem! You capture a moment of freeze dried disdain with skill.

[rhythm&blues]

So appreciative of your review, thank you.

[Jack...]

Wow, this was perfect. You have made your message known beautifully

[rhythm&blues]

I'm really happy you like this, your poetry is quite lovely, this means a lot to me.

[Rita L. Sev]

The eyes tel all, don't they? Good metaphor, old man winter as the representation of cold-heartedness. Keep writing!

[rhythm&blues]

Moat grateful for your support and review, thank you so much.