picture frames (senryu)

picture frames (senryu)

A Poem by dan
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loss of love in abstract tones

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teary eyes and walls;

darkened empty picture frames

that once embraced you.

 

dan © 2016

© 2016 dan


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Abstract, yes. But compelling too. Paints a picture so vivid of loss of love and the emptiness gained.

Posted 3 Years Ago


A deeply touching piece.
I love how senryu and such forms of poetry lets a poet the unique platform to express so much in so few words.
Brevity at it's best.


Posted 3 Years Ago


dan

3 Years Ago

Jyoti, I too enjoy the genre and find that it is more demanding in its form than longer pieces. One .. read more
Jyoti_Ablaze

3 Years Ago

Me too!
You are welcome.
A very short poem to say the least. You painted a picture and set the tone well with these twelve words, though. But it read like an unfinished poem to me. It could say a lot more and really dig into the feelings if there was more behind it. Thank you for sharing.

Posted 3 Years Ago


dan

3 Years Ago

Timothy, This piece is in a poetry format called senryu. It's a three line poem with 5 syllables in .. read more
Timothy Ryan

3 Years Ago

That's cool. Sorry for the mix up. Was just letting you know how to improve your good ideas into eve.. read more
dan

3 Years Ago

thank you.
Love this. I adore short poems that say a lot, and this one absolutely does that. The mournful tone is beautiful. Well done!

Posted 4 Years Ago


dan

4 Years Ago

Thank you, Gaia for your kind words. Nice to hear from you. I'm headed over to your page to return t.. read more
Picture frames... as time passes by turn into memories. Looking at them brings smiles and tears to our faces, those times we can never get back. Sadness, longing, pain and love... most of the time, they all go together. Thanks for sharing this beautiful senryu. :)

Posted 4 Years Ago


Aprille

4 Years Ago

You're welcome Sir. :)
dan

4 Years Ago

I appreciate the gesture, but there is really no need to call me sir. We are all equal here on WC. t.. read more
Aprille

4 Years Ago

Just a habit since childhood I guess ;)
As you wish, I'll call you Dan. Take care.
I have a few empty picture frames...
Where love was once proudly displayed.

Posted 4 Years Ago


dan

4 Years Ago

Empty frames are one of love's potential scars. If only metaphorically speaking. Thank you so much f.. read more
This made me think of a padded cell. Where one has stayed inside for far too long, now excepting it for what it really is. A great write, it really made me think visually. :)

Posted 4 Years Ago


dan

4 Years Ago

Amber, I really like your interpretation of the piece. Having been in a couple of padded rooms mysel.. read more
Amber Lily

4 Years Ago

You're welcome dan, take care!
This is a poignant & original-sounding message. Not crazy about the first line, but the next two more than make up for it. The idea of "frames embracing" is great personification & conveys the implied feelings that the narrator's arms are empty now, too. The trick of these short Japanese poems is to say much more than the very few words used, which you've done well.

Posted 4 Years Ago


dan

4 Years Ago

barleygirl, the first line was intended to set up the other two. Could it have been stronger? Probab.. read more
Strange how powerful a simple picture can be to ones self...memory boxes are a way to keep these locked away for an appropriate time.

Posted 4 Years Ago


dan

4 Years Ago

Thank you for your finely written review, always appreciated. I like your grasp of my writing. take .. read more
How perfectly sad, well done, good read.

Posted 4 Years Ago


dan

4 Years Ago

Thank you Thomas. I will now go to your page for a review to return the favor. take care...dan

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