BIRDSONG

A description of birds singing...

Bubbles of music

Blow through the trees

Dance in the sun

Drift in the breeze

 

Ships made of crystal

Sparkling they float

Finally burst

In bright silver notes.

Reviews

[Frank]

Bubbles of music
Blow through the trees
Dance in the sun
Drift in the breeze

[Suggestions below to help flow and beat
take up
discard suggestion/
or something to think about
its up to you
If you don't want
this kind of suggestion just say
and it is done
thank you]


Ships made of crystal
Surprisingly float
Finally bursting
bright silver notes.

[Marie]

I'm always glad to get suggestions, and yours are certainly valid.

[Vishuddha]

This is a delightful image. I never would have thought of this vision on my own. Thank you!

[Marie]

Well, you think of many other lovely images.

[Will Neill]

Marie I think your discription of bird song being like bubbles of music is perfect. A lovely little poem to start my day.
Will

[Marie]

Thank you. I wonder sometimes if we appreciate birds enough...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

a comforting lullaby of a poem...you create music with your words.

[Marie]

Thank you; I'm glad to hear that.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

A lovely little poem that brought a big smle to my face.

[Marie]

Thank you.

[charlie]

You make the poem waltz, Marie - beautifully

[Woody]

oh my! you definitely are the queen of Nature here, Marie. sumptuous.

[Marie]

Thanks you; I do my best.

[Baby Ricochet]

A lovely nature poem. Nice to read

[Marie]

I'm glad you think so.

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Boats made of crystal
Sparkling they float
Finally fly
In bright silver notes.

[Marie]

Very pretty. THanks.

[Jimmy Yetts]

What can one say, Marie?
Soaring lyrics, gorgeous imagery and artful craft.
Work that enriches the reader!

[Marie]

THank you. I have little around me of nature, but I do hear birds.