Hocus focus

Education related

When you enter school your mind is placed on consignment
Capital is gained by completion of mandatory assignments
Used to test alignment to transitory subjects of study
Time to learn, ready?
The exam can not be completed using hocus pocus
Completion requires focus.
If you try your best and are still failing
This advice will put your mind at rest
Mark C throughout the test
Teachers use it more than any other letter
Sneak a peek to see if your neighbors work is better
If you can’t cheat off your buddy
Then perhaps you should have studied.
 

Reviews

[The Poor Man's Poet]

This is a nice piece, and the end brings a smile.
I think the form could have been a lttle better
but all in all, I still like it. Guess I'll give you a C
since teachers use it more that any other letter.*(smile)*
This is a good write. My one Educational Piece is called (As A Poet)
check it out if you have time. I write for entertainment.

[illprose]

The subject you've chosen is interesting (education) and the way you treat it is nice. The rhymes are a good fit. "Hocus focus" is a playful title, and rhymes usually give a light mood to a poem, making both the title and the rhyming couplets appropriate.

I don't like the rhyming of "alignment" (3) and "assignment" (2) however; a third rhyme feels overdone and unnecessary (not to mention awkward). The end of the poem also feels a bit forced and disconnected. (I would like to see an "And" added to the beginning of line 12.)

On the other hand, I do like the use of the words "consignment" (1) and "Capital" (2). They create an interesting premise, an original image of schooling.

Overall, I think the poem is nice and needs only a few tweaks to be a little better. Entertaining. Well done.