Warrior of Life

Rise and lift thy spirit!

 

 

Warrior of Life

 

 

Oh, trumpet ye, Warrior of Life!

Blow thy horn o’er sea and plain

Thy brightness is a blessing

Across the Earth you duel life’s pain

Transcendency professing

 

Oh, fight ye, then, Giver of Hope!

Wield thy sword and crush despair

Life’s power now asserting

Thy learning is beyond compare

To rise, self-power affirming

 

So do not fall brave citizen

Lift thy soul o’er fear of death

Thy spirit has the prowess

Live fully while you still draw breath

Fight Man’s most dire weakness

 

Arise ye, then, all bleak, dark men―

Black spirit does not suit thee

Of Life, drink full and deeply

Defiant be, and stand with me

Don’t sell life’s treasures cheaply

 

Then trumpet ye, Warrior of Life!

Sound thy horn up to the skies

Thy horn call despair's warning

And though Man’s purpose death belies

Thy spirit ne’er brook mourning

 

 

 

©2008 Richard Puetter

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Reviews

[Scott Free]

Ah! Wonderful, wonderful!
I read this aloud and loved it! Very enjoyable; my heart soared at the end. The thees and thys make it especially good. It looks *really* polished, but if you want I'll tell you a few things I would change, if it were my poem (and I wish it was);
So, do not fall brave citizen
Lift thy soul o'er fear of death

The one sneaky little comma in there actually stumbled me. I think 'So do not fall brave citizen' would be more desirable. It's more straightforward, with more bravado, more moxie. Funny what one little comma can do.

"Oh, fight ye, then, giver of Hope!
Wield thy sword and crush despair
Life's power now affirming
Thy learning is beyond compare
To rise, self-power asserting"

Ok, 'affirming' and 'asserting' don't really rhyme all that well. Even 'assuring' (although I'm not sure that's what you want) would be better because it doesn't have a hard consonant. Even though assuring and affirming don't really rhyme when you think about it, they fit together pretty well when you read it. Even if you didn't change this line, it would still work ok. I would just change it if I were you.
This was time well spent on my part, reading. Great job!

[GetTheHellOut]

An awesome piece. Really liked it. Nice use of your old english.

[Adela Muresan]

,,Wield thy sword and crush despair;
Life's power now affirming.,,

This is my favorite part. I like the immense amount of will to survive you put into it.
Nice stuff.

A.M.

[TL Boehm]

I love the anthemic feel to this, a battle cry, a march....it has that 'ancient warrior song' feel to it. Nicely done. Richly textured writing.

[Jaffa Forbes]

This is very classical, and it's one of the best classical pieces I've read on the internet. Nature imagery works well and you obviously have a clear grasp on the meter and structure. Very, very polished compared to pretty much any of mine!
Well done and thank you for the read.
Jaff :)

[Brianna Brie]

This has an old world feel. Truly uplifting and charming. Well done! Thanks for sharing.

[Satine]

Rick this piece is truly uplifting. It speaks to me of the battles of Life both figurative and literal, though in the end we are promised only death (religion aside) we should never give in to dispair. That we should embrace our struggles for the scars of wisdom and experience they inflict and never forget to rejoice when those fleeting moments allow. I think this is my favorite stanza:

"Arise, ye, then, all bleak, dark men―
Black spirit does not suit thee.
Of Life, drink full and deeply;
Defiant be, and stand with me,
don't sell life's treasures cheaply!"

I see absolutely no reason to change a single word or sentiment throughout.

Satine

[Poeticpiers]

fine piece of writing almost classical in form Regular rhyme pattern good strong theme only fault I can see is you lose your meter. inplaces some lines are a syllable short of the eight required for Iambic terameter .No gret problem to rectify

[Emily B]

This is absolutely beautiful. I felt as if I had travelled back to the likes of Longfellow and Bayard Taylor. Not many can accomplish such wonderfully lyric pieces but you've succeeded masterfully.

[W.Piggy]

Haha, great poem... I really can't see weaknesses. It's so strong. Very nice.
:)