Sequin

I see my heart through a sequined veil

Bright spots hiding that which is dark

Even in starlight the glint of those moments shine

Inside the veil I see darkness

Thin threads holding those loose shimmering spots

As you take each step away they fall leaving only the dark

Alone I watch

The meaning of each spot falling toward the floor 

Known only to me

I prefer to hide behind this veil

Picking those moments off my floor I string them back

Hiding the visage of my heart behind them

For to see the darkness within attracts none

To whom would I shout look

So I show these sequins as my heart

But know its hidden

I bring it out no more

I see it 

Behind a sequined veil

Bright light glinting off moments we shared

Reviews

[Brittni]

Very well written. To me, maybe it is a little restrained and it makes me wonder what you are working soo hard to keep restrained.

[eglantine]

props for using the word 'visage.' I really enjoyed the first two lines of the second stanza--beautiful imagery. The fourth stanza is a bit confusing to me the way it's worded. It's like the speaker falls apart here--not sure if that was your intention but I'm sure there is a more effective way to portray that without the stumbling verbage. It just took me out of the poem. Other than that--great job! Thanks for sharing :)

[Distant horizons]

Excellent write Rusty. Honest and open, yet still a little held back, hinted at, with the moments you pick off the floor.

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. stunning poetry, monsieur ... thank you for sharing your heart with the reader through your words ... i too am a weave of moments shared with my soul mate ... and they are immensely precious to me ... and my heart too has silent and invisible parts ... you've articulated something i needed to articulate ... i relate to this entire image ... i had written a piece once where i described my soul as a cutglass masterpiece that has the signature of my soul mate ... your post reminds me of that piece ... and ... "i watch alone" ... he still doesn't realize what's happening ... a very perceptive review of that post said something to the effect that i am a blind spot in his consciousness ...